Open Poetry #12 |
allofus, everyone (reply to Mistletoe Angel (Someone, Anyone)) |
Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
allofus, everyone allofus, everyone having so much fun we up the speed we feed the greed we must stay on the trip allofus, everyone having so much fun we pay no heed we save no seed we could not give a rip allofus, everyone having so much fun we'd do good deed? we'd have to bleed we'd lose a gambling chip allofus, everyone having so much fun we overfeed we have no need we waddle about so flip allofus, everyone having so much fun we overbreed we don't succeed we go down with the ship krawdad 2.15.01 [This message has been edited by Krawdad (edited 03-16-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wow! An extremely profound piece. Which poem from Mistleto Angel is this a reply to? I must go read it. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
do I qualify as "anyone?" if so, I must say, the saving of the seed depends upon the quality-- But I must say? I am feeling SO loved here-- the inclusion is almost claustophobic! oh? and yer poem...is quite nice... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful write...provocative and powerful! Which work of Noah's are you refering to? The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
You've captured it with the ending. I loved it! I enjoyed this one. Especially the lines "We overbreed" "We overfeed". Shall save to contemplate some more. Thank you, Krawdad, for sharing this. After years of searching, I have found I am nothing more, nothing less...I am in truth Just A Woman after all. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Having finally stepped out of the slow zone...finding Noah's poem that surely must be the one to which you were referring, having come back here and seeing that right out there in the title/subject area, you say the name of the poem. A mind is a terrible thing to waste, I guess I really should use it more often for something other than arguing my own thoughts and rebuttals. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
VAS Your mind is working just fine, Virginia. When I posted this, the name of the poem was not there. I edited it in, but I think you saw it before I got that done. Sorry, my fault. |
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