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Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

0 posted 2001-03-15 09:33 AM

Looking through the Pane

Some days
So clear
This pane
We view
Life through

Oft times
Unique
As oblique
The light
That shines
On through

But panes
Do age
And ripple
From sunlight
Ever warm
Lending
Character
To my view

Me, too

I have been
As clear as glass
Then age
Rippled me some
And now I am
More opaque
But still I
Give some view

You, too

The only refrain
That pains
My pane
Is when I
Have to see
That I might
Not open your
Window
To the truth
Of we

In my lend, I
Only hope to
Mend
This piece
Of peace that
Has been shattered
For it matters
When the pane
Is pained
Beyond hope

Can we cope
When our panes
Are our windows
Flung open and wide?

Or do we treat
The see-through glass
As insignificant
And something
That shall pass?

Right now
The panes
Are rippling….

write with grace, all others lose face;
"Jo was very tall, thin, ... and reminded one of a colt..." LMA

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2001-03-15 09:57 AM

Excellent flow and intriguing phrases/ideas. The panes 'rippling', very interesting idea.

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

2 posted 2001-03-15 09:58 AM

There is so much about this that I like. I enjoy the way you play with the words.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2001-03-15 10:32 AM

Wonderful illustration using the pane as a window to the reality of life....good writing!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois