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Don't read me
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Don't read me |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas 
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Don’t read me. We go, day by day standing inside each others’ words. Give me a reason to tell you all the things that I’ve never said. You know I cry but I can’t let it show, you know I die but I don’t let you know. You know I push when I want you near , you know I strain because I need you here. “when you're finished, I've just begun, when you are sleeping, I'm still awake, and by the time you rise, It‘s my turn to fall.” Love is patient, love is kind. I know we have a lot of life left is us and a little strength. Please watch over me while I sleep alone. You won’t touch me and you don’t read me yet. But I know you are there so make me remember that together means so much more than apart. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like the title it draws the reader right in. I really like the poem it hits the nail right on the head...in a poetic way of course. Funny haow these things cab become too big if we let them....I liked this part so much..... Love is patient, love is kind. I know we have a lot of life left is us and a little strength. Patience and kindness will work!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
You've done well with this, and the first stanza is my favorite!  Enjoyed!  |
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Embers_Before_God Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 101USA |
nicely done...embers |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
"Reasion" Your poem is sweet. |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
ok so you said don't read me, but evidently you must be mad at me cause I didn't read it so now I'm breaking your wishes and reading it anyways. *gasps for breath* so don't get mad at me because I'm not paid to read you mind. just your words. and work that corner, but that's another story. lol ok and now you've just told me I'm the ****? well as long as it isn't nasty **** I guess I won't complain. lol seriously now - nice tone and consistency here, wonderful title to set it off. you keep the tone and setting solid and yet keep building on it, all the while maintaining that integrity. I especially liked this part: "When you're finished, I've just begun, when you are sleeping, I'm still awake, and by the time you rise, Its my turn to fall" that shows the depth of the frustration in this piece while the next part shows the amount of faith and hope it contains as well. wonderful mix hun. People demand freedom of speech to make up for the freedom of thought which they avoid. --Soren Kierkegaard |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sigh |
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