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WhtDove
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0 posted 2001-03-14 09:50 PM


The warm sun streams through the trees
Shedding light upon the wooded pines
The aroma of freshness fills your nostrils
As the sun glints off the sparkling lake.

The old green pier, paint peeling
Where I've sat watching the water ripple
And the little bugs that skim the surface
Zipping this way and that and round in circles

Walking down the sandy, rocky road
To sit quietly in the sand pit and watch
Waiting for those loveable deer
To come sprinting by with their young

With their sandy coats and white paint splotches
As their ears are perked, concentrating
Waiting to see if they're in danger
Then munch upon the cool grass

Vibrant reds, yellows and purples
Strewn across the plush greenery
With the tangles of berry bushes
That became a feast to the animals

The mucky bottom of the lake
The coolness of the water
That chilled you momentarily
As you took a dive from the pier

The old boat silently riding
As the wooden oars stirred the water
Crossing half the lake to the island
To lazily walk the trodden paths

The sunsets beauty
As it painted itself across the sky
With deep pinks, purples and orange
The days end mirrored in the lake
Showing off Nature's Majesty


Here's the challenge for those who are interested.
Nature's Majesty Challenge




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Lone Wolf
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1 posted 2001-03-14 10:20 PM


White Dove,

The imagery in this was absolutely stunning!!! I'd say you have met the challenge and then some!! I felt like I could see it all as you described it right there in front of me. Excellent!!!

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

ethome
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2 posted 2001-03-15 07:47 AM


I love the word pictures you have painted here to create the images that bring the reader so close to the wonders of nature.......beautiful work!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

SEA
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3 posted 2001-03-15 09:24 AM


Dovey~ this is great......I could feel the muck on the bottom of the lake.......... makes me want to go swimming. SEA
Cerenity
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4 posted 2001-03-15 09:44 AM


Hi WhtDove,

So breath takingly beautiful and the imagery is stunning, I would say you met the challenge so well and I think I will try now,

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



Poet deVine
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5 posted 2001-03-15 06:45 PM


This is beautiful!!! And look at all the pretty poetry you inspired!
Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2001-03-15 06:54 PM


WhiteDove~
Very nice imagery.
Enjoyable read.
~*Marge*~


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sandgrain
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7 posted 2001-03-15 08:49 PM


Wow, never knew you felt that way when we went there. Actually, the greatest beauty's seen in retrospect, right? This piece is a treasure both in memory and poetry. Thank you.
Love, Mom

Moon Dust
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8 posted 2001-03-15 08:54 PM


Wow reminds me of the pier near where I live excellent job.

Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning.


WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
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Illinois
9 posted 2001-03-15 09:32 PM


Thank you so much Lone Wolf! Your words touch me deeply.

ethome it's a pleasure being able to bring you into my world for but a moment.

SEA I hated that muck. LOL ewww, always freaked ya out. But it was fun.

Cerenity I'm blessed you liked it so well. I see you tried, and you did a fantastic job yourself. ~Thanks~

Thank you Sharon, I miss Wisconsin I really do. I'm happy if I inspired anyone.

Marge I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you.

Mom I didn't feel that way then. LOL It was going back and being grown, and knowing how rare that peace and beauty now days are.
I miss it terribly. Thanks you and hugs. love ya!

Moon Dust I'm glad it brought back memories for you. Thanks much!!


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I know not what the future holds,
but I know Who holds the future.

I don't question YOUR existance - GOD


Dark Angel
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10 posted 2001-03-17 04:51 PM


Oh, this is real pretty Angel, I could feel that breeze and see the beauty

Maree

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11 posted 2005-02-07 11:13 AM


vividly beautiful
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