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Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

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0 posted 2001-03-13 09:40 PM

Goodbye

The day opens still,
unafraid
and closer than most.
Fog rises soft,
its ghost floats
long and low
over the stones,
above the grasses
of the shore's
sinewy slope.

We have known
of this day,
unfolded
its moments often.
It is ours,
alone.

We touch and sigh,
tender lovers,
speak hushed,
grateful words,
look hard into
one another's eyes
and absorb the
climbing light
of our last
shadowbox sky.

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-03-13 10:00 PM

a most soft, haunting goodbye....but one that beckons to the spirit of the love....

Kit McCallum

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2 posted 2001-03-13 10:06 PM

Beautiful Claire ... this was a lovely, soft and tender read, just wonderful!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Meadowmuse
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3 posted 2001-03-14 08:32 AM

Sunshine, Kit, thanks to you both. It is just a memory now, but one that, to my way of thinking, warranted a few thought-about lines. Thank you for reading.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

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Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-03-14 09:50 AM

Ooh... I like.

The last stanza especially. "Our last shadowbox sky." That is simply excellent.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2001-03-14 09:55 AM

Very nice work indeed! I really like this!

"look hard into
one another's eyes
and absorb the
climbing light
of our last
shadowbox sky."

Great mood and setting!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-03-14 07:50 PM

there's always room for another memory Claire. . .

wonderful my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Poet deVine

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7 posted 2001-03-14 07:55 PM

Claire, this is wonderful. Please don't ever thank me for reading your work, it's I who needs to thank YOU.

Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04

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Wilmington, Delaware

8 posted 2001-03-14 08:05 PM

when I want to aspire to better love poetry - it is poetry such as this I will aspire to - I can think of no better model

JLR
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9 posted 2001-03-14 08:11 PM

This made me feel, made me remember. Thank you.

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

10 posted 2001-03-14 08:14 PM

So many memories and each one a poem. Good work. Joyce

Meadowmuse
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Posts 3263

11 posted 2001-03-15 10:04 PM

Hello, everyone, and thank you all for reading my poem. Please forgive me for not being able to "be here" as much as I would like, but I am trying to visit as I find the opportunity. Take care all. (o:

Allan, thank you for your simply excellent response! How do you make those little green faces?? (o:

ethome, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the mood of this piece. It was, alas, bittersweet. (o:

Sven, I couldn't agree more. Thank you, always, for reading and letting me know. (o:

Poet deVine, you possess charm just as lovely as your name. Thank you, thank you, thank you! (so there!) (o:

Wilfred, such sweet words from you...thank you. Seems to me you do just fine, my friend. (o:

JLR, I'm glad. Thank you so much. (o:

Joyce, yes, I agree. If we were to write all our memories in verse, why, we'd never again know the misery of writer's block! Thanks very much for reading and letting me know you enjoyed my poem. (o:

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Alwye

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In the space between moments

12 posted 2001-03-18 10:29 PM

"and absorb the
climbing light
of our last
shadowbox sky." --once again, you leave me breathless with words and images such as this...how someone can be so unique with phrasing and imagery is beyond me...and yet you do it time after time. Gorgeous, sorrow-filled work, Claire. It was truly a pleasure to read, as always.

*Krista Knutson*

"Can't run fast enough
Can't hide I can't fly
I'm struggling with the limits of this ordinary life..." ~Tracy Chapman

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

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13 posted 2001-03-19 05:37 PM

Krista, I'm sorry to be so late in responding. Thanks, sincerely, for saying such nice things about my work. I'm so pleased this piece touched you.

Take care,
Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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