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my muse needs a drink
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my muse needs a drink |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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This sober living has me too uptight I think I will take my muse out for a drink get her drunk and write something profound. No I take that back thought provoking right now is the last thing I need. I want to laugh and run and throw my cares to the breeze. My muse she writes too boring... tells me she is hurting and I try to ignore her I won’t read what she rights but she stretches words into a tightrope and writes me as the high wire walker I gotta tell you the view is frightening. I think she needs some loosening up a drink might just do the trick and then my words instead a clothesline will be and me...I am clean laundry flying in the breeze. Yes we could give uptight a whole new meaning she could write me rolled small into a ball and toss me from happy hand to happy hand. Together we could write a jump rope and taking turns little girls bouncing curls and giggles is what you will see in me. and if... I get her good and drunk and her words are too slurred to be dishonest she will write your arms around me and I in heaven will be. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I loved this!! I was hit so hard by the ending......wow......excellent writing!  SEA |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I've heard of being three sheets to the wind...is that what you mean by 'being clean laundry hanging in the breeze"? Me thinks your muse has already had a few my dear PDV, he=he=he Enjoyed the read a lot!!! |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
this is simpily outstanding. The imagery is fantastic, the flow, the thoughts........I love it! Am saving. Wonderful Jellybeans!!!!!!!!!!!! After years of searching, I have found I am nothing more, nothing less...I am in truth Just A Woman after all. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
hey jb. . . anytime you'd like to go. . . just let me know. . . I'm sure that our muses could use it!!!! excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jellybeans--I know just what you mean...loved this write..great job..and your muse seems pretty active to me...and free. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
really I think my muse is drunk nice one, enjoyed muchly Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I like this. Makes me want to go out and treat my own tonight! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Great poem! I just heard a new song today, one of the lines is "Heres to nights we felt alive" Well Heres to our muses and may they all feel much better after a nice big pina colada (palm tree included free) Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
JB...I shall jump with you take a moment to write a bit, sip a quip then land and break our lip did I tell you, I'm klutzy? |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I loved the imagery you diaplayed...brilliant write! Nathan |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I had such a bad day yesterday, I didn’t realize I hadn’t thanked anyone on this one…..so here goes SEA thank you…and yep I didn’t know how I was gonna end it, and then it just hit me…just like it did you…you know that honesty thing VAS lolol…..the other day you called me Doreen…now PVD…nope not either, I am just me, though both are such quality writers that I am complimented, thank you Justawoman thank you so much for your compliments, your energy is catching Sven (see below) just join the group under the palm tree…the more the merrier…..thanks kind sir Martie well its been active and for that I say thanks, but not free…overburdened is more like it……sigh…thanks Moondust thanks and if so, I gotta say you are the lucky one Temptress yep…you go right ahead…join me and catalina…and sven…we are the ones laughing under the palm tree Catalina Moon loved your comment…and yep…..a pina colada under a palm tree sounds mighty good Sunshine lol…I think most are klutzy when drunk…so we shall be good company lady, thanks for the verse Nate Dogg thank you never been described as brilliant before |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Even for your muse, the reprieve that drink offers is only temporary... this soars with playfulness and whimsy but ends in the reality of missing... *S* I love this one... whatever your muse needs, give it to her... for she is giving you some gems! *S* |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
jellybeans...uh, that's your name, right? are you any relation the jellybean King? that name, jellybean King always, ALWAYS makes me think of Billie Jean King...anyway, sorry I've called every thing under the sun...oh, well maybe not that, I'll try to get it right sooner or later, no sooner. yeah, I got a kick out of your drinking poem, maybe that's why I didn't recognize you...three sheets wavin' in my eyes. oh my, my brain is fuzzy again, it's late and I ate too much. |
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