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- The Curse Of Eros -
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- The Curse Of Eros - |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Although this poem went in the opposite direction it was originally inspired by "The Secrets Of Love" By Sven The Curse Of Eros I curse thee Eros...as I cry, solitary, to drown in sigh within the darkness of grey hour spinning idly by, so shall it be, I curse thy name ev'ry nightfall for delay of desire, for refusing to deliver my kindred love when I call ~ * ~ Violin strings cut, this tiresome dance doth end, a fool, 'twas I, to believe that you're my angelic friend, you anchored my ship - never to set sail 'pon the tides of romance everlasting devoid of affection, I die a thousand deaths from rejection's sting ~ * ~ I damn you Cupid, god of love I beshrew the smug heavens above, you pranced and laughed on wing while I wept for this contract broken, and promises unkept ~ * ~ Hide now from skin, forlorn, crescent moon do not pity this off-key, moanful tune reveal not this spirit, cloaked in pain leave me to wallow in the blood of heart, now slain ~ * ~ I condemn you Eros, king of sly I paint the stars grim, and throw curse to the sky, I'm weary of waiting for the train of destiny, upon the tracks, I lay, chained by decree, never free ~ * ~ Set my soul afire to burn this passion dead lonesome ashes saturate my being, alas, fate's misfit - never to wed, Valentine wishes erase to nevermore, aspirations are ruptured in disarray, Spring melody yields to Winter howl, each dawn is blackened to decay ~ * ~ The yearning for kinship true, numbs to nothingness I renounce this shell of doom, as anguished lips struggle for breath in suffocation of envy, green as stone tears of jade bitterness of the heart, ungranted prayers hath made ~*By Melissa Honeybee*~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 03-13-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Melissa~ This sings with sting - such melancholy-laced lamenting - 'Hide now from skin, forlorn, crescent moon do not pity this off-key, moanful tune reveal not this spirit, drenched in pain leave me to wallow in the blood of heart now slain' *Hugs* for a powerful piece of penning. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Hmmmm excuse me...your talent is showing! Excellent writing. ~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~ |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
oh missy, this hurts to read, very powerful and so full of anger and sorrow. you must have hope, and please believe me when I say that you are beautiful inside and out! you really are - ask any of your friends! these lines had an impact on me... "I'm weary of waiting for the train of destiny I lay down upon the tracks, chained by the decree of never free" "the yearning for kinship true, numbs to nothingness I leave this shell of doom, watch my anguished lips struggle for breath, in suffocation of envy, green as stone tears of jade bitterness of the heart, ungranted prayers hath made" oh my! just so painful to read, you have progressed muchly in your writing. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
indeed it did go in the opposite direction Melissa. . . and did so kicking and screaming!!! excellent my friend. . . powerful and daring. . .  --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Melybee - what a read! Thank you for this! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Margie-girl - I know that darker poems are not usually your cup of tea, so thank you for reading my poem, choosing favourite lines and for replying Mysteria - What a high compliment!  You're very talented yourself  Chelsea - Hey girl, thank you and hugs! Sven - Thank you for inspiring me and for the compliment! Karilea - I'm glad that you liked this, and thank you so much for helping me edit my poem The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams ~Melissa P. Monette~ |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
I Pray in future you take stringent care on where you place your prayers. Found the poem commanding. |
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windwarrior_RJ Junior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 28California |
This is excellent writing. I hope it is just the muse with melancholy and not the lady. Take care. RJ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! Melissa what a powerful work you've created here! The yearning for kinship true, numbs to nothingness I renounce this shell of doom, as anguished lips struggle for breath in suffocation of envy, green as stone tears of jade bitterness of the heart, ungranted prayers hath made The entire poem is well written and intense provocative work! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes, this was quite good. Now I have to dig up that other poem by Sven and have a look see. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I tried to reply to this one last night...you have taken to this dark style quite admirably! So here's hoping that as I hit "submit reply" I will not get that dratted boot again...sigh...(me having troubles  ) Enjoyed very much--now fingers crossed and clicking... |
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