Open Poetry #12 |
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Exit Wound |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
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He entered my life and fragments of him Shattered into every part of me leaving nothing untouched Penetrating to the depths of my soul finding places in me I thought didn't exist couldn't exist Until him……………………… If he ever leaves I know the exit wound will be so great there will be nothing or no one capable of healing me and making me once again whole ~SEA~ |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
I have one of these exit wounds. You've put such feeling into these words and I could feel them profoundly. Great writing. ![]() Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. T S Eliot |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The exit wound will heal it just may take time...and time heals all things...this is an excellent write SEA I enjoyed the cadence in flow....ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i know exactly how you feel...... thank you for sharing this... well said ![]() |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ Wonderfully done ! ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is fantastic...I loved the comparison here! and personally I am weary of being target practice...sigh...just wonderful, SEA. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If he ever leaves I know the exit wound will be so great there will be nothing or no one capable of healing me and making me once again whole ================ WHEW... talk about impact of metaphor... Sea-girlie...this is a very cool poem... and hits hard in the emotion zones... excellent writing ... one of my new favs of yours.... and you already know I felt this one... very cool...very well conceived poem. Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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kismetkelsey Junior Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 32Canada |
Wow.A powerful title and a very poignant poem! Loved the way you painted this person's importance in your life.Well done! |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent. . . I really like this one SEA. . . it's very powerful and shows the depth of emotion. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What a wonderful idea for a poem! I love it! The poem itself is very good....coming up with the idea is brilliant. You are good, SEA ![]() |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Princess Pout~ thank you very much ![]() Ethome~ thank you, he hasn't left yet, and I do all that I can to prevent it ![]() Doreen~ you are awesome, thank you ![]() Marge~ ![]() ![]() Serenity~ lol @ target practice....that was good ![]() Janet~ thank you so much for the wonderful compliment ![]() Kismetkelsey~ it's about my husband, he is my everything ![]() ![]() Sven~thank you very much! ![]() Balladeer~ thank you....your praise feels like a hug...you made me smile so big...thank you for that! ![]() ~SEA If I let you into my heart..... will you promise to stay? ~Sue~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
SEA this is wonderful!! I love the 'exit wound.' Oh the depth of love... ![]() |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you Dovey!! ![]() |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Powerful lines at the end, SEA. Sometimes, we never know how strong we are until we have to be. Hope he doesn't leave!! ![]() LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very powerful writing SEA! Excellent expression ... I could feel the impact in this piece, great work! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
He entered my life and fragments of him Shattered into every part of me leaving nothing untouched Penetrating to the depths of my soul finding places in me I thought didn't exist couldn't exist Until him……………………… If he ever leaves I know the exit wound will be so great there will be nothing or no one capable of healing me and making me once again whole" ~SEA~ Yes, and no one is going to leave you, you're beautiful! you ARE whole, I insist ![]() Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
This was so beautifully expressed...I loved the idea that a significant other can become so much a part of us...so much so, that to break apart from them would be painfull, if possible at all! Jellybean King |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know what you mean Sea...once you begin to give if the recipient leaves you find you have no one to share all those feelings and desires with and I have felt I need to begin to bring all those desires back to me...James |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
This one really hit a nerve (pardon the pun) *S*. I love the comparison to the gore of a wound, but then again, I like dark stuff. This was really cool SEA. |
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bslicker![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Oh Sea, I really love this. A true love that you never want to leave. Great write. ![]() Bernie Bernie Slicker |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
He did make a good entrance, hopefully he'll acknowledges that. Great poem! ![]() A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is wonderful, SEA... you've described well how important someone can be to us... so that even the contemplation of their absence is too much to bear. *S* Well done! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
and then you have to wonder what magic 'time' holds over us...so many of us here have these wounds...and yet time finds a way to heal...greatly expressed lady ![]() |
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