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Packratmike
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0 posted 2001-03-11 02:42 AM


The Moon and I

The moon is not a gem, you know.
It’s just an imperfect, pitted orb
borrowing light from the heart
of our solar system
in an attempt to gain favor with us.
Sometimes it’s cold and lonely.
Sometimes it’s warm and loving
but that all depends upon
when and where
you are watching it.

The moon is not a gem, you know.
It’s just a cinder
surrounded by glowing embers
in a velvet universe....
all
competing
to draw
an admiring look their way.

The moon and I have a lot in common.
This morning, I wonder
if ever I will find your eyes.....
watching the moon.



"HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike

© Copyright 2001 Mike Powers - All Rights Reserved
Agust P
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1 posted 2001-03-11 04:01 AM


in my opinion a great poem! thanks for sharing, AP
Sunshine
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2 posted 2001-03-11 08:20 AM


Well, you just took my emotions and shoved them this way and that....a good read!
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3 posted 2001-03-11 08:25 AM


This is outstanding. I just loved it. Will put it into my library for safe keeping and many reflective thoughts. I thank you for sharing it.
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4 posted 2001-03-11 05:49 PM


Very nice

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5 posted 2001-03-11 11:44 PM


This has such a lonely feel to it, but I like it a lot! Nice job.

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6 posted 2001-03-11 11:57 PM


You have so dissected the moon, but still wrote a lovely poem. Joyce
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7 posted 2001-03-11 11:59 PM


Sigh Mike...reflected glory...is that what you hope to see?
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8 posted 2001-03-12 12:33 PM


PackRatMike~
Oh ... I like this.

'The moon is not a gem, you know.
It’s just a cinder
surrounded by glowing embers
in a velvet universe....'


I enjoyed the imagery.
~*Marge*~



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Panne
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9 posted 2001-03-13 03:29 PM


Mike,
Beautiful and so true.
Panne

dragonpoe
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10 posted 2001-03-16 04:05 PM


dear panne, you have now made me take a second look at something I love. What a sad way to invision the moon. But a lovely poem.

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Packratmike
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11 posted 2001-03-16 04:18 PM


Thank you all for the nice comments. The Moon from a different perspective...maybe not portrayed as beautiful as the other celestials surrounding it but still yearning for an admiring eye. The moon can be many things....this is just one of the things it can be to this "poet".

Packratmike

Kethry
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12 posted 2001-03-16 07:38 PM


Packratmike,
and I sister moon agree with you, sometimes I am a burnt out cinder looking for admiration, sometimes my waxing and waning is a sham and always I am a relfection of my brother sun but still I need to be praised and admired as do you. Light comes from within in this poem and I liked it a lot.
Shine on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Katherine Chandler
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13 posted 2001-03-17 12:14 PM


A touching poem, Mike. Well expressed and I loved the last line so much, it was brilliant in my mind! Kate

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

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