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The Moon and I
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The Moon and I |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA 
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The Moon and I The moon is not a gem, you know. It’s just an imperfect, pitted orb borrowing light from the heart of our solar system in an attempt to gain favor with us. Sometimes it’s cold and lonely. Sometimes it’s warm and loving but that all depends upon when and where you are watching it. The moon is not a gem, you know. It’s just a cinder surrounded by glowing embers in a velvet universe.... all competing to draw an admiring look their way. The moon and I have a lot in common. This morning, I wonder if ever I will find your eyes..... watching the moon. "HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike |
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Agust P Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 157 |
in my opinion a great poem! thanks for sharing, AP |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, you just took my emotions and shoved them this way and that....a good read! |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
This is outstanding. I just loved it. Will put it into my library for safe keeping and many reflective thoughts. I thank you for sharing it. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Very nice Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
This has such a lonely feel to it, but I like it a lot! Nice job. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
You have so dissected the moon, but still wrote a lovely poem. Joyce |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh Mike...reflected glory...is that what you hope to see? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PackRatMike~ Oh ... I like this. 'The moon is not a gem, you know. It’s just a cinder surrounded by glowing embers in a velvet universe....' I enjoyed the imagery. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Panne Junior Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 15South TX, USA |
Mike, Beautiful and so true. Panne |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
dear panne, you have now made me take a second look at something I love. What a sad way to invision the moon. But a lovely poem. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Thank you all for the nice comments. The Moon from a different perspective...maybe not portrayed as beautiful as the other celestials surrounding it but still yearning for an admiring eye. The moon can be many things....this is just one of the things it can be to this "poet". Packratmike |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Packratmike, and I sister moon agree with you, sometimes I am a burnt out cinder looking for admiration, sometimes my waxing and waning is a sham and always I am a relfection of my brother sun but still I need to be praised and admired as do you. Light comes from within in this poem and I liked it a lot. Shine on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
A touching poem, Mike. Well expressed and I loved the last line so much, it was brilliant in my mind! Kate Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. T S Eliot |
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