Open Poetry #12 |
Call of the Loon... (revised) |
Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
A whisper so soft, ... as if was not spoken, Night's gentle breeze, ... the quiet unbroken, Oaken cathedrals, ... worship the moon, As silence is broken, ... by call of the loon. A melody haunting, ... sad music she weaves, Through still of the forest, ... through shimmering leaves, Seeks out the answers, ... eternity's call, No answer forthcoming, ... no answer at all. Shadows are dancing, ... at touch of moon's glow, First breath of twilight, ... on lush land below, Vespers of evening, ... sound forth through the limbs, Whispering winds, ... sing out nature's hymns, Echoes the loon, ...over forest and glen, Night's benediction, ...called forth from the fen, Doe stops to listen, ... beside stands her fawn, Awaiting the answer, ... awaiting new dawn. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
We are sympatico tonight, it appears. The moonlight brings out the elemental forces in all creatures, I believe. A lovely composition, this reminds me, somewhat, of Debussy. Thank you, hope you are well, my friend. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mike~ This has such a tender soft feel to it...like soft silk over skin...beautiful words woven in golden rhyme...no one does it like you...and I doubt they ever could...this is superb!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You folks sure answer the full moon....this is lovely....a wonderful [re]read to wake up to and enjoy.... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
the imagery is breathtaking in this, and I mean that. Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Beautiful! This is like a Monet in poetry. VEry lovely, truly! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ Just so very lovely ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Mike love this Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Breathtakingly beautiful, Mike! What I got from this is that the answer is found in the new dawn, or in other words, that focusing on that coming new dawn brings hope for the answer. I love the sense of hope that this expresses, at least to me, anyway! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A whisper so soft, ... as if was not spoken, Night's gentle breeze, ... the quiet unbroken, Oaken cathedrals, ... worship the moon, As silence is broken, ... by call of the loon. A melody haunting, ... sad music she weaves, Through still of the forest, ... through shimmering leaves, Seeks out the answers, ... eternity's call, No answer forthcoming, ... no answer at all. Shadows are dancing, ... at touch of moon's glow, First breath of twilight, ... on lush land below, ========================== suberb imagery and the cadence of this is perfect the is was a pleasure to read aloud Mike excellent vocabulary choices very well done poet sir..as always. Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Mike: This is lovely! It brought back many memories of watching and listening to loons. I grew up in Canada and you have captured the feeling loon voices create. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Beautiful... I love it... Plus I love loons, so it only gets better! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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