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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Would thou offer but a brief respite? Even under temporary conditions, Is not a moment still a moment? If that is all thee have To hold onto, Would not that count just the same? Many times thy gaze lay disturbed, Troubled by unconscious thought And of toils too many to tame Rest seems an unattainable thing Yet the power lies ever Just below the surface within Thy peace and comfort Used to be held steadfast But before your eyes, slipped away Taken on the wind with incense Borne of sleepless offerings, And onto wishes of another day Thou art the catalyst for inspiration For even a moment, if not eternal Thus the words, a seductive proliferation Given the choice between The hardness of unfinished stone Sought for most rare and coveted value, And softness as the sky itself, Thee would be all of this Polished lovingly a softer shade of blue |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you for this....and just look....600 blessings from your pen.... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this poem...James |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Oh cool...oh, now its 601. |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
I found this reading to be quite comforting and very real. Nice writing! Kate Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. T S Eliot |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very soft.....and beautiful  SEA |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Love the feel of this. I believe it has a depth much greater than I can reach in a couple quick reads. It felt good to me, though. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Would thou offer but a brief respite? Even under temporary conditions, Is not a moment still a moment? If that is all thee have To hold onto, ================== But before your eyes, slipped away Taken on the wind with incense Borne of sleepless offerings, And onto wishes of another day Thou art the catalyst for inspiration For even a moment, if not eternal Thus the words, a seductive proliferation Given the choice between The hardness of unfinished stone Sought for most rare and coveted value, And softness as the sky itself, Thee would be all of this Polished lovingly a softer shade of blue =============== "Taken on the wind with incense Borne of sleepless offerings, And onto wishes of another day" very very cool thoughts here PK "Thou art the catalyst for inspiration For even a moment, if not eternal Thus the words, a seductive proliferation" indeed poet sir ... indeed they are.  excellent imagery and metaphor in this ... especially the last 5 or so lines ... the vocab and language adds to the overall grace of the read ... as does the element of longing & angst that builds up till the summation of the endings emotions another beauty from your pen. Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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