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Lone Wolf
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Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2001-03-08 11:08 PM



He knocks softly on the door
I look up and motion him in
As I smile at the smile I see
He asks how I am
I say all right thanks
Asking how he is in return
His reply says he is great
Can’t argue with that

He stands by me as we talk
I get a phone call
He can tell by my reaction
It isn’t good news
I feel his hand resting softly
On my shoulder
Trying to ease the tension
He sees on my face

Afterwards he asks gently
If everything is okay
I say I’m not sure yet
He reassures me it’ll be fine
I can do anything
Then he says something
That makes me laugh
Which I am grateful for

How does he know
When I need to laugh
Or what to say
I’ll never know
But I will always
Be thankful for those times
He tries to ease
The burden I feel

His ways are effortless
Small meaningful gestures
That mean more than
I can ever say to him
He makes me feel
Like I am someone
I know at least
To him I am

His shift is over
Time for him to go
I tell him
Have a nice night
He says he will
Then tells me to take care
As he leaves I watch him go
Thinking how lucky I am

To have him in my life
As my friend
At this time
Is priceless
Someday
I will tell him
What it means
To have him there



Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer L. Garcia - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2001-03-08 11:25 PM


make that someday soon..*s

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



JLR
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Posts 1785

2 posted 2001-03-08 11:37 PM


Tell him...NOW! Great write!
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3 posted 2001-03-08 11:37 PM


Your thoughts are warming your heart, but your words would warm his soul...tell him! What a nicely worded acknowledgement of a very wonderful life where two can live in harmony and love.

~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~

Packratmike
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since 2001-02-25
Posts 632
California, USA
4 posted 2001-03-09 02:29 AM


very nice read.

Packratmike

Celeste
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since 2000-11-11
Posts 597

5 posted 2001-03-09 06:21 AM


Beautiful! Gentle honesty, and it shines!

To hold tomorrow we must first be willing to let go of yesterday.

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
6 posted 2001-03-09 07:44 AM


Lone Wolf - I have found a close friend is to be cherished, as they are few and far between. I have some friends, but only a few that I consider very close.

BC

Jellybean King
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since 2001-03-07
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Jelly, Bean
7 posted 2001-03-09 11:01 AM


Your feelings come through warm and clear in this written from the heart poem. I liked the way you set this up...by choosing not to include dialog between you two, it puts some distance between the reader and the action in the poem. But, I found this an effective way to show a certain amount of emotional distance between you and your friend...meaning that you want to tell him how you feel but put it off to someday in the future. I think the combination of this made this piece powerful in a subtle sort of way. Very enjoyable read!

Jellybean King

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

8 posted 2001-03-09 11:14 AM


A good friend is a treasure! Tell your friend he is a friend and you appreciate him!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Katherine Chandler
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since 2001-03-07
Posts 280
Florida, USA
9 posted 2001-03-09 11:50 AM


'How does he know when I need to laugh.' I love this line. These are the kinds of things 'real' friends know to do. I loved the pure simplicity of this poem, a really, 'feel good' read, I enjoyed so much.

Kate

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

Lone Wolf
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Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
10 posted 2001-03-10 12:14 PM


Wynter . . . *s, thanks.

JLR . . . I get the hint!! LOL.

Mysteria . . . The time will come. We will see anyway. Thank you for reading.

Mike . . . Thanks!

dreamkeeper . . . Always honest!

BC . . . True friends are a treasure and should be treated as such I think. They make life worthwhile with their presence.

JK . . . Thank you, but I rarely write dialogue into any of my poems. Just not my style. No hidden meanings here, but thanks for the comments.

Kathleen . . . YOU are a treaure, sweetheart. I'll be sure to take your advice.

Kate . . . Thanks for reading. I am glad you enjoyed it.




Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
11 posted 2001-03-10 12:45 PM


From the way you wove this my friend...I'll
bet he knows I loved the simple way this
was done...by simple I don't mean
easy...merely simple to follow and
feel...like standing on the sidelines
watching it all unfold in front of your
eyes...love the way you weave~


Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
12 posted 2001-03-10 01:17 AM


jen-

*sighs* this my friend is simply
equisite poetry. holly stole the words
outta my mouth lol i too was going
to say from the way you've expressed this
i'm sure he already knows. take care
sweetie--and so glad to see you so happy!

amy

"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
13 posted 2001-03-10 05:03 AM


I have some friends that were there for me when I went thru some very rough times...I value them a lot...James
Dennis
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since 2001-02-19
Posts 235
Indiana
14 posted 2001-03-10 05:51 AM


well sure, I think this is just great, you know I think sometimes people don't even know the meaning of the word friendship, it's a true blessing, that it is.
enjoyed.

Dennis

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
15 posted 2001-03-10 05:56 AM


LW....you know what I would say to this....so I shall leave it...on the wind....
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