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I'll Tell Him . . . Someday
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I'll Tell Him . . . Someday |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
He knocks softly on the door I look up and motion him in As I smile at the smile I see He asks how I am I say all right thanks Asking how he is in return His reply says he is great Can’t argue with that He stands by me as we talk I get a phone call He can tell by my reaction It isn’t good news I feel his hand resting softly On my shoulder Trying to ease the tension He sees on my face Afterwards he asks gently If everything is okay I say I’m not sure yet He reassures me it’ll be fine I can do anything Then he says something That makes me laugh Which I am grateful for How does he know When I need to laugh Or what to say I’ll never know But I will always Be thankful for those times He tries to ease The burden I feel His ways are effortless Small meaningful gestures That mean more than I can ever say to him He makes me feel Like I am someone I know at least To him I am His shift is over Time for him to go I tell him Have a nice night He says he will Then tells me to take care As he leaves I watch him go Thinking how lucky I am To have him in my life As my friend At this time Is priceless Someday I will tell him What it means To have him there Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
make that someday soon..*s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Tell him...NOW! Great write! |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Your thoughts are warming your heart, but your words would warm his soul...tell him! What a nicely worded acknowledgement of a very wonderful life where two can live in harmony and love. ~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~ |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
very nice read. Packratmike |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Beautiful! Gentle honesty, and it shines!  To hold tomorrow we must first be willing to let go of yesterday. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Lone Wolf - I have found a close friend is to be cherished, as they are few and far between. I have some friends, but only a few that I consider very close. BC |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
Your feelings come through warm and clear in this written from the heart poem. I liked the way you set this up...by choosing not to include dialog between you two, it puts some distance between the reader and the action in the poem. But, I found this an effective way to show a certain amount of emotional distance between you and your friend...meaning that you want to tell him how you feel but put it off to someday in the future. I think the combination of this made this piece powerful in a subtle sort of way. Very enjoyable read! Jellybean King |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
A good friend is a treasure! Tell your friend he is a friend and you appreciate him! Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
'How does he know when I need to laugh.' I love this line. These are the kinds of things 'real' friends know to do. I loved the pure simplicity of this poem, a really, 'feel good' read, I enjoyed so much. Kate Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. T S Eliot |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wynter . . . *s, thanks. JLR . . . I get the hint!! LOL. Mysteria . . . The time will come. We will see anyway. Thank you for reading. Mike . . . Thanks! dreamkeeper . . . Always honest! BC . . . True friends are a treasure and should be treated as such I think. They make life worthwhile with their presence. JK . . . Thank you, but I rarely write dialogue into any of my poems. Just not my style. No hidden meanings here, but thanks for the comments. Kathleen . . . YOU are a treaure, sweetheart. I'll be sure to take your advice.  Kate . . . Thanks for reading. I am glad you enjoyed it. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
From the way you wove this my friend...I'll bet he knows I loved the simple way this was done...by simple I don't mean easy...merely simple to follow and feel...like standing on the sidelines watching it all unfold in front of your eyes...love the way you weave~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
jen- *sighs* this my friend is simply equisite poetry. holly stole the words outta my mouth lol i too was goingto say from the way you've expressed this i'm sure he already knows. take care sweetie--and so glad to see you so happy! amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I have some friends that were there for me when I went thru some very rough times...I value them a lot...James |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
well sure, I think this is just great, you know I think sometimes people don't even know the meaning of the word friendship, it's a true blessing, that it is. enjoyed. Dennis |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LW....you know what I would say to this....so I shall leave it...on the wind.... |
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