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The Darkness Is Complete
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The Darkness Is Complete |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
The darkness is complete A black velvet softness Am I awake or asleep As I hover in this bliss The quiet is unending The cock will not rise No sound is he sending To awaken our lives I hear the blood flow Through my relaxed veins Don't rush... go slow Forget the passing days So dark I can not breath So quiet I can not feel My thoughts must leave So that I may heal What is the sound of silence Blood flowing, hair growing Mind fog thick and dense The speed of thought slowing Blackness with diamonds The gleem coming through Air moving through lungs An awareness back in you The night once again over The trip made to end God lifted earths cover Light, love, peace to send |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
ME Wow had to read this more than once. Then had to add to library. I like this.  Bernie Bernie Slicker (aka also: justsomeofme) |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Thank you, Bernie. Glad you liked this. ME |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I see that you understand ME. . .  Excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Yes, Sven, and sometimes we don't want to leave, right? Thanks for the reply ME |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
What is the sound of silence Blood flowing, hair growing Mind fog thick and dense The speed of thought slowing Blackness with diamonds The gleem coming through Air moving through lungs An awareness back in you The night once again over The trip made to end God lifted earths cover Light, love, peace to send ==================== Mother E .. this is EXCELLENT ... this is one of your best me thinks... and its a very cool poem too a poetic blend of imagery and cadence... I have noticed quite a growth in your rhyming in the last couple poems ... very well done!! Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Janet Marie, I am red of face and teary eyed from your words of praise. Thank you. Hugs, MB (me) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What an excellent description of morning - the darkness is complete. *S* Well done, ME... I enjoyed! |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Thank you suthern, for the reply. When you have insomnia as often as I, you yearn for the blackness. ME |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Mother Earth- I like this muchly, and the flow is perfect. Wonderful write. Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 03-07-2001).] |
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Brian Beaudry Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 57Northern Ontario Canada |
Being new here thereare so many gifted poets to read works from.In my few days here you are fast becoming one of my favorites Mother.Lovely read and beautiful message!! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Lovely feel to this one. A couple spelling changes for some homonyms used will increase its strength. Last night darkness was complete here, too. Then, I woke up just before 3:30 and there was this brilliant light streaming in the window. The full moon was reflecting for all it was 'full'y worth. Wow! did it ever wake me up for a couple hours anyway. |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Poeminister, Thank you Brian Beaudry. you are so right about all the gifted poets here. I am still trying. Thank you for the kind words. VAS, you always have helpful hints. And yes the moon is lovely, but I'd rather be asleep and miss the light. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
ME, Wonderful thoughts in this one. I enjoyed it very much. We must first experience the dark in order to recognize the light. Well done. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Oh mom....this is fabulous...I've read it three times and will read it more...very calming and soothing as I read...a feeling that is sought after with a hunger here! Beautiful work!!!! I won't say I'm impressed because that would be sending the message that I didn't think that it was in you to write like this....when I know that it was...and can't wait to read what else you have in that heart and pen of yours!!!! Love you~ |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Lone Wolf, so glad you liked this enough to read a comment. Thanks Butterflies, my kid, take all the calming and soothing you need! I wish it could be my arms instead of words. Thank you for being you. Love and hugs, Mom |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
NO darkness can ever be complete there is a light whose ember burns Tonight Tomorrow Forever It cannot be extinguished No matter the storm or maelstrom of minds there is Always one light which Always shines More about that later. AT "Learning to listen, learning to see. Learning is Power, making me free. Free to believe again, in my Human side...Be a Good Day." Jon Anderson |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Aman, AT, Aman |
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