Open Poetry #12 |
Missing You |
Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
The days seem to go just a little bit slower without you here. The sun's golden light isn't as bright and Heaven isn't quite so near. And every day the radio seems to play the same sad song as the day before. Each and every night I try with all of my might not to miss you, but I miss you more. Everyone that I see looks as if they could be the one that I love, but they're never you. They may have the same look and if that's all it took I would take them home and make them do. But there's a light in your eyes you could never disguise and it's something I can't duplicate. You and I were meant to be and only now do I see that walking away was a terrible mistake. If I could only find you now and make you see some how how wrong I was and how sorry I am. Then I would hold you close, never again to let you go. And we could fall in love all over again. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sadly written, Tennessee Angel. Sometimes though, the sun shines through the rain and then we see that maybe it wasn't a mistake after all. Just a thought. Here's wishing you the happiness you deserve. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
'I would take you home and make you do'...if only it were so simple. Good! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'The days seem to go just a little bit slower without you here. The sun's golden light isn't as bright and Heaven isn't quite so near.' 'But there's a light in your eyes you could never disguise and it's something I can't duplicate.' This is incredible emotional writing, TA! Great lines here! I love this! sp do I believe we'd be better off apart? can I see my world without you in it? baby, not for a single minute... |
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JCGF Member
since 2001-01-19
Posts 72MA |
TIME! Time is all you need. If this person loves you, then know that they are thinking of you just as much as you are thinking of them. Well said, well written. Just know that this is a learning experience. Just a few thoughts. Take care and thanks for the write. Tammy |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
TA~ very moving write...truly felt this one. can relate to it on some levels. all i can say is if love is meant to be it will be and if you set someone free and they come back to you--then they are yours. if they don't well then just remember the good times...and in time your pain will begin to heal. take care. amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Missing and wishing and wondering if they're feeling the same misery... It's tough... and you've written of it well! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You don't know how much I would love to have Michelle say these words to me...James |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Wow! What lovely responses. You all are truly an awesome group of people. It means so much to have people read and enjoy something that you've written. And just so no one thinks I'm at home depressed and suicidal.. ..this is completely fiction..just something bouncing around in my head..but it's awesome to have so many people get something out of it. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
*sigh*..... you wrote my heart.... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TennesseeAngel~ What a lovely write. I'm sure you'll touch many hearts with this one. 'Everyone that I see looks as if they could be the one that I love, but they're never you.' Ohhhh ... such are the ways of the heart. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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