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Another Sin (with new & improved non-illegal language)
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Another Sin (with new & improved non-illegal language) |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
He reminds himself to see, To remember what it’s like To still feel And for each wound he’ll bear Are reminders to the world That he is still there In debt to the price paid Worth more than the simple tokens At his feet laid For the sacrifices are far greater Than the rewards sometimes, But make good theater He tempers his resolve With faltering confidence In his world revolved Reliving moments in his mind With a cold, cruel cut Each and every time Penance exacted once again By another form of prayer For another kind of sin |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
He tempers his resolve With faltering confidence In his world revolved Reliving moments in his mind With a cold, cruel cut .......sad......I didn't see the other poem but this one I could feel ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, PK.... |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Didn't realize it read a certain way to some people. Never was meant along those same lines as others have done. Thanks. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He reminds himself to see, To remember what it’s like To still feel And for each wound he’ll bear Are reminders to the world That he is still there ==================== For the sacrifices are far greater Than the rewards sometimes, But make good theater He tempers his resolve With faltering confidence In his world revolved Reliving moments in his mind With a cold, cruel cut Each and every time Penance exacted once again By another form of prayer For another kind of sin ============================= a masterful penning of metaphor and rhyme PK ... as well as an intense expression of emotional angst and irony. yes, the reader does indeed feel this ones depth and impact. "He reminds himself to see, To remember what it’s like To still feel" "By another form of prayer For another kind of sin" very well done poet sir ... as always. (thanks for the poetic fixx) *S* Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
You're welcome. *S* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well apparently I missed the illegal version. This has an air of doom to it that suits my mood. You have a unique style, and well suited to the darker verse--another beauty! |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you. Join me on the dark side. |
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