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here's to missing you, breathing and shiny floors (repost)
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here's to missing you, breathing and shiny floors (repost) |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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here's to missing you, breathing and shiny floors -one- I miss you, yes, my heart the most I think and you are still very much inside my head but my body has long since made absent the ache and refuses to be reminded of the gentleness of your touch your kisses so soft, and how I miss the brown of your deep eyes and how I could see into more than just today in your your laugh and your smile... but your hands, your hands my love will never be gone from me I can close my eyes and feel them still your hands loved me, even before you said so with your eyes -two- inside the red inside my head they overflow the tears and pour down my shirt filling the red until open the window I must or I will drown fresh air bathes relief maybe in my missing you I just forgot to breathe -three- you are gone and I am left to make some sense of it all by myself and so I put on knee pads and rubber gloves and meticulously (irrationally) wax the floors as if it will bring you back -four- and if I sleep instead of pacing with the stars as my company will I miss you any less? you are my quiet the still place in my soul, pace for pace step by step you softly numb my thoughts until the tired makes my feet stop and so I ask if I sleep instead will you be any less gone? march 6 the day you grew wings and I earthbound cried out to you with love and despair like never felt before shall forever mark the calendar with my missing I wish you could come back and take the rest of me with you [This message has been edited by jellybeans (edited 03-06-2001).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like these a lot, dear lady... and identify all too well with the last three. *S* |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh, my, the last two stanzas are more powerful than all. Wonderfully poignant, dear one. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'and if I sleep instead of pacing with the stars as my company will I miss you any less? you are my quiet the still place in my soul,' The whole thing was fantastic, but these lines especially stood out to me! Excellent, excellent work of illustrating such lonely (for lack of a better word) emotions, jb! I love these! sp  do I believe we'd be better off apart? can I see my world without you in it? baby, not for a single minute... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
march 6 the day you grew wings and I earthbound cried out to you with love and despair like never felt before shall forever mark the calendar with my missing I wish you could come back and take the rest of me with you ======================== when I saw the title ... I recalled this one and I remembered it being one of my favs by you ... as I reread it...I remembered why... when I got to the above verse(that was not on the first post?) I knew WHY I felt it so much the first time ... ((HUGS)) to you on this day, my friend ... I understand the need to mark the time. Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
suthern...i wish you could just come over here and hug me...and hey if not that, can you make tomorrow come sooner? thanks lady VAS and snowpants...thank you much, today is rough.....posting helps, your comments touch me  JM yep, I know you understand and nope the last verse comes from the previous year's 'march 6' poem......just sorta combined them.....thanks lady...hugs |
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JCGF Member
since 2001-01-19
Posts 72MA |
WOW! I will bet that this person is aware that you are truly in love. If they aren't aware of that then it isn't your problem any longer. In my opinion this person your writing about is missing out on something wonderful. Nice write! Beautifully done. Hugs, Tammy |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
you have no idea how moved I am....reading this  Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is a real fine poetic approach! What a great angle you've writen your perspective from....good work !! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
JCFG thank you and yes, he left not just me, but this world...no way to make the missing go away cept time... Kathleen, thank you...sigh, wish no one had to identify with missing you poems, but its not that easy ethome, thank you, sometimes I do this, its all the same feelings but it pours out of different sides of the glass...then i scoop it up and put it all in the same container thanks for noticing |
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