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jellybeans
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0 posted 2001-03-06 11:57 AM


here's to missing you, breathing and shiny floors

-one-

I miss you, yes,
my heart the most
I think
and you are still very much
inside my head
but my body has long since
made absent the ache and
refuses to be reminded
of the gentleness of your touch
your kisses so soft, and
how I miss the brown of your deep eyes
and how I could see into more
than just today in your
your laugh and your smile...
but your hands,
your hands my love
will never be gone from me
I can close my eyes
and feel them still
your hands
loved me, even before
you said so with your eyes

-two-
inside the red inside my head
they overflow
the tears
and pour
down my shirt
filling the red
until open the window I must
or I will drown
fresh air bathes relief
maybe in my missing you
I just forgot to
breathe

-three-
you are gone
and I am left to make some sense
of it all
by myself
and so I put on knee pads
and rubber gloves and
meticulously
(irrationally)
wax the floors
as if it will bring you back


-four-
and if I sleep instead
of pacing with
the stars
as my company
will I miss you any less?
you are my quiet
the still place in my soul,
pace for pace
step by step
you softly numb my thoughts
until the tired makes
my feet stop
and so I ask
if I sleep
instead
will you be any less gone?



march 6
the day you grew wings
and I earthbound
cried out to you
with love and despair
like never felt before
shall forever mark
the calendar with my missing
I wish you could come back
and take the rest of me
with you





[This message has been edited by jellybeans (edited 03-06-2001).]

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suthern
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1 posted 2001-03-06 12:45 PM


I like these a lot, dear lady... and identify all too well with the last three. *S*
VAS
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2 posted 2001-03-06 02:38 PM


Oh, my, the last two stanzas are more powerful than all.

Wonderfully poignant, dear one.

snowpants
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3 posted 2001-03-06 03:42 PM


'and if I sleep instead
of pacing with
the stars
as my company
will I miss you any less?
you are my quiet
the still place in my soul,'

The whole thing was fantastic, but these lines especially stood out to me! Excellent, excellent work of illustrating such lonely (for lack of a better word) emotions, jb! I love these!

sp


do I believe we'd be better off apart?
can I see my world without you in it?
baby, not for a single minute...

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2001-03-06 04:02 PM


march 6
the day you grew wings
and I earthbound
cried out to you
with love and despair
like never felt before
shall forever mark
the calendar with my missing
I wish you could come back
and take the rest of me
with you
========================

when I saw the title ... I recalled this one
and I remembered it being one of my favs by you ...
as I reread it...I remembered why...
when I got to the above verse(that was not on the first post?)
I knew WHY I felt it so much the first time ...
((HUGS)) to you on this day, my friend ...
I understand the need to mark the time.


Some find subtlety in strangers
some find subtlety alone
Your eyes,you see everything
my eyes,I see its all together now
and I know.
~candlebox~

jellybeans
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5 posted 2001-03-06 05:16 PM


suthern...i wish you could just come over here and hug me...and hey if not that, can you make tomorrow come sooner? thanks lady

VAS and snowpants...thank you much, today is rough.....posting helps, your comments touch me

JM yep, I know you understand and nope the last verse comes from the previous year's 'march 6' poem......just sorta combined them.....thanks lady...hugs

JCGF
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6 posted 2001-03-06 08:32 PM


WOW! I will bet that this person is aware that you are truly in love. If they aren't aware of that then it isn't your problem any longer. In my opinion this person your writing about is missing out on something wonderful. Nice write! Beautifully done.

Hugs,

Tammy



Irish Rose
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7 posted 2001-03-07 03:14 PM


you have no idea how moved I am....reading this

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
8 posted 2001-03-12 01:40 PM


This is a real fine poetic approach! What a great angle you've writen your perspective from....good work !!
jellybeans
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9 posted 2001-03-12 03:42 PM


JCFG thank you and yes, he left not just me, but this world...no way to make the missing go away cept time...

Kathleen, thank you...sigh, wish no one had to identify with missing you poems, but its not that easy

ethome, thank you, sometimes I do this, its all the same feelings but it pours out of different sides of the glass...then i scoop it up and put it all in the same container
thanks for noticing

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