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HappyPretender Junior Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 38Prince George, VA |
Blind Attempts All I ever tried to do was love you Completely and with all my heart You took it all away And tore me apart Was I too blind to see That was what you'd do Or was I hypnotized, clueless Just so in love with you. This is pretty bad but its how I feel. This is the best way for me to get that out. ~*Rachael*~ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Rachael~ Welcome!!  Expressing what is in your heart, is always good....it's how we heal....I hope you keep writing, I look forward to reading more SEA |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
There's nothing wrong with your words, they are honest, and believe me, it's not easy being hypnotized, now in love yes, you can be.....keep writing, work it out, write it out, it's a tremendous outlet for release.... Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
No bad poetry can be written when it comes from the heart...I hope you will have an opportunity to visit our pages, read some inspirational and moving poetry, and in turn, share more with us. Welcome! Check your e-mail for a special message... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 03-07-2001).] |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
This is very good Rachael, sure there is others that can relate. I sure can.. Welcome to a family of friends,,, passions in poetry. Bernie Bernie Slicker [This message has been edited by bslicker (edited 03-06-2001).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
A promising start. Welcome. (and don't listen to what they say: there's PLENTY of bad poetry out there This isn't it, though.Mike |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
This is an excellent poem and PIP is a great place to vent (or express)your feelings. I'm sad cause you're sad. Welcome. Melton |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
The truth and honesty in a poem make the poem. Well done... ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Heavens, no, it is not bad! It has excellent flow, a strong poignant point in a short, grabbing poem. Welcome! A good introduction to yourself, I do believe. Let us see more! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I think many of us can identify. *S* Welcome to Passions! |
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JCGF Member
since 2001-01-19
Posts 72MA |
Well said. Welcome to passions. This is the place to unload and you have done just that in a very nice way. Hug's Tammy |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
There is so much truth here. Love is blind, but in the end we always see. Nice outpouring of emotion. Welcome to passions. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Nothing written from the heart is bad. You are a poet, as we are, and are welcome to share your work here.  |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Rachael, Firstly welcome to Passions and I hope you enjoy your stay, secondly no poetry is bad if it is spoken from the heart and this is a wonderful piece of poetry thank you so much for sharing. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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