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Who Am I ? |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
She stumbles down the street Looking for a quiet place to cry. She doesn't want to turn another trick tonight, To hear another man scream out someone elses' name. She is Molly...not Sue or Diane or Jenny. No one will want the woman she is, But she doesn't know any other her. She has done this half her life... ...she is seventeen. He stands across the street, In the shadows of the old maple tree She loved to watch change colours in the fall, Watching as they sold all the pieces of their life. She was sick for so long, And it took everything they had Searching for a miracle. And still she died... ...he's forty three. He stands outside the bar Determined not to go in. He had it all, wealth, family, position. He grew up drinking, because he could. Now, he has to Just to face the unspoken expectations, And one more dinner with Mom and Dad. He opens the door... ...he is twenty one. Lines crossed. Lives forever changed. Little deaths unmourned every day. Who am I to judge Someone elses' choice? 'Til I've lived their life 'Til I've felt their pain. Who am I to judge? Who am I to say? [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 03-05-2001).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
wow this is extremely powerful stuff very good yuh |
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Taffetta Junior Member
since 2001-02-26
Posts 27 |
Very powerful words indeed. It is hard to judge another person until you have walked in their shoes. Enjoyed your writing - thank you for sharing. Taffetta |
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DreamLess Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92 |
(who am i ) to talk in the stand of a wonderful poet like you??!! WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL) EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula dear heart, this is truly utterly wonderful, you are some writer love this is truly outstanding. I love it, absolutely first class writing, excellant presentation and it's superb. Hey, have you all met my sister, she's one of the best  darling girl this is utterly wonderfulTake care love as always Mushy  And you know I love this don't you? Good! Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Walt...you flatter me sir...thank you Taffetta...thank you for reading...its always so easy to look at a person and make a snap judgement on what you see...harder to SEE beyond what your eyes alone encompass DreamLess...you are you...and your thoughts and dreams and words mean as much as mine...thanks for reading Marsha...sister of my heart...what can I say to you? I love you...and thanks We all have wings...some of us don't know why |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is an intense and powerful write Paula. You have touched on so many things here and the ending is so open and so wise!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Lines crossed. Lives forever changed. Little deaths unmourned every day. Who am I to judge Someone elses' choice? 'Til I've lived their life 'Til I've felt their pain. Who am I to judge? Who am I to say?' This is some extremely moving and thought-provoking stuff, Paula...thank you so much for sharing this. Maybe we'd all hesitate to judge if we'd take more time to understand...great write! sp  do I believe we'd be better off apart? can I see my world without you in it? baby, not for a single minute... |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
That was very different and I really enjoyed it. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Eric...wise? I dont know about that...I just know that not everyone has a real choice in how they live the life they do...and I certainly dont have the right to judge...offer my hand yes...thank you sp...its easy to look at someone and decide their worth on the clothes they wear...or how their hair is cut..or the kind of car they drive...its also easy to miss wonderful people because you didnt look past all that to the person underneath...the heart inside...thank you JLR...LOL well sometimes I get up on my high horse...or my soapbox...I'm glad you liked it...thanks |
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