Open Poetry #12 |
Once Upon A Time |
Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
“ONCE UPON A TIME” by Bill Charles ~~~~ I remember the quiet evening, when we first met, it was during the summer, warm, with a peaceful sunset… You were sitting there, wearing a pretty blue dress and all, brown hair flowing, and with eyes so soft, I heard them call… We spoke at the same time, and I fumbled with my words, they just wouldn’t come out straight, only backwards… It didn’t take much to do this, just one loving look from you, and I had these strange feelings, didn’t know what I should do.. I stumbled and fumbled, as you showed me the prettiest smile, one like I have never seen, and I stood there staring, for awhile… You held my hand in yours, and I knew it was you alone, that made me feel the way I do, happier than I have ever known… I must be the luckiest person in the world, and won’t forget, being there that quiet evening, for it’s something I’ll not regret… Never have I met someone, with your tender ways, and now I have known you, during every night, and all of the days… Not once have I felt the closeness, that you give so true, and I will be eternally grateful, for meeting you………., “Once Upon A Time” ~~~~ |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
I had to smile gently at the open honesty in this. Beautiful and touching! I could just see it. "Success is going from failure to failure without losing enthusiasm." ~Winston Churchill~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ah yes - a trip to a wonderful faroff memory...Lovely, BCI... Lovely... |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Bill-Captivating words, a memory to hold on to of someone special who had captured your heart, I know the feeling you portray. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Bill, you never cease to amaze me. . . This is excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Taffetta Junior Member
since 2001-02-26
Posts 27 |
Bill You weave a beautiful tale, so honest and sincere. Thank you for sharing it. I enjoyed the ride. Taffetta |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Bill "It didn’t take much to do this, just one loving look from you, and I had these strange feelings, didn’t know what I should do.." Beautiful words, gives me the goose bumps. Ariana |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Bill... Oh, I always enjoy reading the love from your heart.......this is so fresh, and new, and it makes me feel like a teenager in the springtime!!!! Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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Kerri S Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 61Rhode Island |
Words right out of a fairy tail. You even helped me to imagine where you were by how you brought us into the setting. Wonderfuly written. Kerri |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Once upon a time Moonchild took a chance and met the one behind the blue exchanged in sweet word dance. He fed her well with thoughts of then and now, tomorrows will A certain special someone, was this tale of sweet Barbill haaaaaa* wanted to tease you a bit..Italian anyone? M "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love how this goes Bill! You are sure leaving a lot of romantic notions in the reader's mind. But you are so darn good at these romantic scenes! I love the format too......good work .....my friend!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
To everyone who replied to this writing. You are some of the most gracious poets that I have had the chance to meet here on Passions. I thank you from my heart, each and everyone of you for the replies. BC |
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Brian Beaudry Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 57Northern Ontario Canada |
Very beautiful and touching poem!! I could feel the love in every pen-stroke Bill, the tenderness and gentleness of true love, you are a lucky man my friend!! Brian |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I ahve added this to my Library.....this is wonderful.... Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Such a wonderful fairy tale. |
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