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Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

0 posted 2001-03-04 09:44 PM

“ONCE UPON A TIME”
by
Bill Charles
~~~~

I remember the quiet evening, when we first met,
it was during the summer,
warm, with a peaceful sunset…
You were sitting there, wearing a pretty blue dress and all,
brown hair flowing, and with eyes so soft,
I heard them call…

We spoke at the same time, and I fumbled with my words,
they just wouldn’t come out straight,
only backwards…
It didn’t take much to do this, just one loving look from you,
and I had these strange feelings,
didn’t know what I should do..

I stumbled and fumbled, as you showed me the prettiest smile,
one like I have never seen,
and I stood there staring, for awhile…
You held my hand in yours, and I knew it was you alone,
that made me feel the way I do,
happier than I have ever known…

I must be the luckiest person in the world, and won’t forget,
being there that quiet evening,
for it’s something I’ll not regret…
Never have I met someone, with your tender ways,
and now I have known you,
during every night, and all of the days…

Not once have I felt the closeness, that you give so true,
and I will be eternally grateful,
for meeting you……….,
“Once Upon A Time”
~~~~

Celeste
Senior Member

since 2000-11-11

Posts 597

1 posted 2001-03-04 09:48 PM

I had to smile gently at the open honesty in this. Beautiful and touching! I could just see it.

"Success is going from failure to failure without losing enthusiasm."

~Winston Churchill~

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2001-03-04 10:17 PM

Ah yes - a trip to a wonderful faroff memory...Lovely, BCI... Lovely...

Gemini
Senior Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

3 posted 2001-03-04 10:23 PM

Bill-Captivating words, a memory to hold on to of someone special who had captured your heart, I know the feeling you portray.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-03-04 10:31 PM

Bill, you never cease to amaze me. . .

This is excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Taffetta
Junior Member

since 2001-02-26

Posts 27

5 posted 2001-03-05 08:28 AM

Bill

You weave a beautiful tale, so honest and sincere. Thank you for sharing it. I enjoyed the ride.

Taffetta

Ariana
Senior Member

since 2000-10-08

Posts 571
Orlando, Florida

6 posted 2001-03-05 02:08 PM

Bill

"It didn’t take much to do this, just one loving look from you,
and I had these strange feelings,
didn’t know what I should do.."

Beautiful words, gives me the goose bumps.

Ariana

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

7 posted 2001-03-05 02:47 PM

Hi Bill...
Oh, I always enjoy reading the love from your heart.......this is so fresh, and new, and it makes me feel like a teenager in the springtime!!!!

Live...Love...Be grateful for both!!

Kerri S
Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 61
Rhode Island

8 posted 2001-03-05 02:47 PM

Words right out of a fairy tail. You even helped me to imagine where you were by how you brought us into the setting. Wonderfuly written.

Kerri

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

9 posted 2001-03-05 03:33 PM

Once upon a time
Moonchild took a chance
and met the one behind the blue
exchanged in sweet word dance.

He fed her well with thoughts of then
and now, tomorrows will
A certain special someone,
was this tale of sweet Barbill

haaaaaa* wanted to tease you a bit..Italian anyone?

M

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

10 posted 2001-03-05 04:10 PM

I love how this goes Bill! You are sure leaving a lot of romantic notions in the reader's mind. But you are so darn good at these romantic scenes! I love the format too......good work .....my friend!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Ariana
Senior Member

since 2000-10-08

Posts 571
Orlando, Florida

11 posted 2001-03-05 08:30 PM

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Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

12 posted 2001-03-05 08:36 PM

To everyone who replied to this writing. You are some of the most gracious poets that I have had the chance to meet here on Passions. I thank you from my heart, each and everyone of you for the replies.

BC

Brian Beaudry
Member

since 2001-03-03

Posts 57
Northern Ontario Canada

13 posted 2001-03-05 08:38 PM

Very beautiful and touching poem!! I could feel the love in every pen-stroke Bill, the tenderness and gentleness of true love, you are a lucky man my friend!!
Brian

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