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Convictions of Small Minds
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Convictions of Small Minds |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Living each moment under the watchful stare Walking the day feeling exposed...completely bare Examine me and tell me how much I disappoint Judgment is made mine with the blame you appoint My shoes you fill with your morals and belief I’m sequestered from a moment of silent relief Lay heavy the words of indignation Bring with it your own blinded revelation The mirror you hold reflects no sin of yourself That lays in the darkest room upon the highest shelf Why look to you...when my faults flow abundant And my blackened soul lays weak and repugnant Ironic now that my daily actions...once disregarded Now inspected...with harsh penalty cruelly imparted Falling from grace and her warm embrace I now lay crushed under the feet of your disgrace Grind me with your heels of condemnation Break away my self esteem without hesitation I only scream that you entertain this one thought How well have I learned the lessons...you've taught My dear friends...worry not, I'm fine and doing better every day. This is something that I Needed to write in order to let it go~ [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 03-03-2001).] |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Strikingly said. Great last line. "Convicted by Small Minds" if I read you correctly. Well done AT "There is nothing so resilent and fprgiving as a heart that is open. And nothing so stony, impenetrable and closed and cold, as a heart once closed" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yes I know what you mean Butterflies! It's a long old road that doesn't have a turn in it. These unwilling lessons that you have been forced to learn have a way of turning on the one who is being so unfair....great adjectives make up the lines in this piece..it's very powerful!! ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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ocean New Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 6 |
Please email me Ocean if you have any questions regarding the deletion of this reply. In the future read the guidelines before posting a poem or a reply to another's poem. Denise [This message has been edited by Denise (edited 03-03-2001).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Heavy the hand that deals the blows...heavier still the heart that inflicts words that lessen who we know we are...I love you Holly...great write We all have wings...some of us don't know why |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Let it flow sweet Butterfly.......and remember, you are so much more than even you know.....  SEAIf I let you into my heart..... will you promise to stay? ~Sue~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This poem is oppressive... Friends appreciate and compliment us while our enemies dispise us and criticize us...James |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Talk about poetic cleansing. Well said my dear friend. I am so glad that you have found your voice. It is sometimes easier to confront a past demon when we already are under full steam and you demonstrate that so well. Your words ring sharp but they are done so in such a wonderful poetic piece that the sting is left only to those that still judge and condemn without ever having tried understanding and listening. Fly high my sweet butterfly of today's world and I will sit back with smiles and laughter as you shower us all with your beauty and strength. Oh yeah, I almost forgot....I loved the choice of words used to nail the rhyme together with great impact and your pauses within the lines were done superbly.  There see, I can critique your poems objectively and after all, that is one of the reasons we learn to grow so well isn't it?  ( cheez.....and to think I said I would never use these guys....well, after all, it is only a back scratch isn't it?)  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
well Butterfly I don't think anyone can say they feel exactly what you are feeling or have been going through although I will try by saying it's not easy....no one ever said all life would be..and I am telling you that I go back and forth feeling these same things..I am almost looking forward to a huge storm they are calling for, so that with each shovel of snow I will toss the anger and hurt away from me... a very good write huggsss and hoping each day improves ~Wynter/Maureen/Moonchild "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ironic now that my daily actions...once disregarded Now inspected...with harsh penalty cruelly imparted Falling from grace and her warm embrace I now lay crushed under the feet of your disgrace Grind me with your heels of condemnation Break away my self esteem without hesitation I only scream that you entertain this one thought How well have I learned the lessons...you've taught ===================== "Ironic now that my daily actions...once disregarded Now inspected...with harsh penalty cruelly imparted" yes...exactly.. the lack of respect and equal treatement ... the lack of returned effort ... its does indeed cut deep.... "I only scream that you entertain this one thought How well have I learned the lessons...you've taught" whew...that cuts deep too... powerful purge of the pen me girlie... but I know with every release you get stronger and heal ... awesome writing baby... they cant all be love poem *winkie* love ya me SS  meYou Break It by Diana De Witt/J.Tesh I've tried to tell you but its fallen on deaf ears ... how hard youve been on my heart If thats the way you wanna play I cant compete ... Youve given me the bitter ... now I want the sweet. you know... everything you do ... comes back on you ... everything you do ... comes back on you. If you can hear me ... consider this a warning. something your mama left out-- When its concerning matters of the heart .. you better play fair right from the start. cause ...you know...everything you do ... comes back on you ... everything you do ...comes back on you ... If you break it...youre gonna pay for it... If you break my heart ... youre gonna pay for it. Maybe you would rather choose to not believe it... Maybe you'll just hide your eyes but the truth has a strange way of revealing and my heart wont be the price .. you know...everything you do ... comes back on you ... everything you do ...comes back on you ... If you break it...youre gonna pay for it... If you break my heart ... youre gonna pay for it. Truth sees thru all disguise ... and my heart will not be the prize. everything you do ... comes back on you ... everything you do ...comes back on you ... If you break it...youre gonna pay for it... If you break my heart ... youre gonna pay for it. (everything you do comes back on you) Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Big hugs to all of you, the reason for this poem is this...I live in a very small town and my current situation has left much room for judgement and opinion. My real point in the poem was to cleanse some of the feelings that have been weighing me down, it was not directed at any one person and I've always been of the "turn the other cheek" mentality. But to be honest...the rumors that are started and the half truths that are believed....well they hurt, I've always lived my life "doing on to others...." you know...living the golden rules, sure I've stepped on some toes in my life too. The lesson that I was referring to in the end of the poem is seeing how much it hurts to be judged and remembering the pain that you can cause someone without ever touching them...and making doubly sure that I think before I speak...."judge not....lest ye be judged". There was an case of mistaken identity here and I again want to say that this was written with no one imparticular as the subject or for that matter no one situation. Thank you for your words of kindness...my heart always feels cleansed after a visit to the walls of this place....Love to all~ [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 03-03-2001).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
BDC wonderful piece of writing and as long as when you look into your heart you are at peace, and I'm sure you are, then let the others go hang. I've never believed in judging, besides I would forever disappoint anyone looking for a saint. This is an astounding and wonderfully powerful piece and I'm sure that you now feel tons better. Your spirit shines, your wings will help you fly and in truth and beauty you will be free. Take care love as always Mushy  Fly free butterfly  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
My Butterfly kid, you are getting so strong!! I know " sticks and stones will break my bones, but words will never hurt me!" looks easy to live by, but the words and the "friends" they come from, hurt! I KNOW you , as the new person you have become, will be able to turn the other cheek. Life is too short. Remember who you are! And that is my kid and I don't believe you can fail. It is "the others" that have the problem. Love and hugs, my kid, Mom |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
So true... Very well done! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
amazing.... Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
holly- this was so powerfully written. quite intense--every stanza just flowed together perfectly. awesome write my friend...just awesome. and may you heal and purge with every word you write with that wonderful pen of yours! take care love ya amy ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
we will always have friends. . . sometimes, in the most unlikely of places. . . and in the most unlikely of guises. . . and they will teach us the lessons of life. . . excellent Holly. . . good to see you back here these days. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A wonderful title graces a powerful poem here... Wagging tongues don't care how much pain their lashes inflict... but sometimes it helps to remember that when someone is pointing a finger at you, 3 times that many fingers are pointing back at them. *S* |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, Powerful poetry here my friend. Judgment of any kind to anyone is just not fair yet it continues. People say things without thinking of the impact it will have on another's life. I am sorry you have had to go through such a thing. You know where I am if need me. Take care you. (((((hugs))))) Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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