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one grin grave |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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tell me... look into my eyes, tell me, see past my despise, tell me, open up--your lies- TELL ME I am mesmerized. hold me... I am reach of skin, hold me, every pore within, hold me, I'll believe again. scolding scalding simply sin to melt renewing spot of fin within within an ocean's sway a simple whisper one grin grave within the foam I'll be forgave and dive unto the depths of you and wash my sins away with wave... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
S'en....you have a style all your own girlie...and it feels awesome to read your work when you pull the emotion the way that only you can. Great writing my friend! Love to you~ "I wish the real world would just stop Hasseling me!" Real World MB20 |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
an ocean's sway a simple whisper one grin grave within the foam I'll be forgave and dive unto the depths of you and wash my sins away with wave... ===================== because I lack so much ... I dont know what the poetic formal name for this type of poem ... a long time ago ... I began calling it "sen structure" ... what ever the name... you have made it your own signature style in this one...you have made it succinctly perfect I've said it before...you bleed poetry down the page baby.. pure poetry.  meStrange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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