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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa 
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Incantation Tender tender is the tread that winds its way to love, Slender slender is the thread that binds me hand in glove, Colder colder I would be without your gentle touch, Older older than the sea but knowing half as much, Find me find me oh my love time is short make haste, Bind me bind me hand in glove lifes to short to waste, Hold me hold me gentle dove ever to be near, Teach me teach me oh my love for ignorance is fear. Olias. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sounds like a song.........quite beautiful  SEA |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tender tender is the tread that winds its way to love, Slender slender is the thread that binds me hand in glove, Colder colder I would be without your gentle touch, Older older than the sea but knowing half as much, ============================= very cool write Olias.. love the repetative phrasing a lovely chant of cadence kissed devotion I like the uniqueness of this one. way cool  sing to me sing to me in your rhyme promises of love to stand the test of time write me write me a sweet spell in verse your gift of harmony in sweet poetic curse Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OLIAS~ Quite an enjoyable read. Very imaginative piece. I played a little magnetic poetry with your verse~ 'Incantation Tender slender is the tread that winds its way to love, Slender tender is the thread that binds me hand in glove, Colder older I would be without your gentle touch, Older colder than the sea but knowing half as much, Find me bind me oh my love time is short make haste, Bind me find me hand in glove lifes to short to waste, Teach me hold me gentle dove ever to be near, Hold me teach me oh my love for ignorance is fear.' Olias. I genuinely enjoyed this. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
SEA, Thank you for your reply, a song.... thats an idea. J.M. Hi there, thanks for your kind words, and the verse, be well poet friend. Marge, I'm glad you liked this, thanks for your reply and for the alternative verse, its interesting how by moving things about you can create something different. Regards to you all Olias. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You always touch me with your writing...thanks |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Olias, this likes me so much it followed me right into my library.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I particularly liked this: "Slender slender is the thread that binds me hand in glove..." It so happens that during esbat, a high priestess, binds herself, lest her thoughts materialize and affront The Goddess--as sabbat is not a day for self, but for worship only... Very touching read for me, and very very astute rendering here. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
just beautiful..*s ~Wynter |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
That's quite a magical ritual of romance you've penned there Olias...very well done my friend!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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