Open Poetry #12 |
Melted Confessions |
Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I want so much to tell you how that first glance melted me How that moment undid my soul...setting me completely free I could tell you what the first touch set into motion The euphoric waves of sun kissed emotion I should tell you how it felt...your body so close to mine The way the flames of tempted desire and love entwine I needed tell you how that first moment was magically created The taste of your lips on mine...pure and heavenly fated I attempt to tell you the need to love you grows stronger within me How the sound of your voice cleanses my soul with serenity I could tell you how it feels when you visit my dreams When you cover me in the satin and lace moonbeams I started to tell you how it feels to be loved this way Then I looked into your eyes and my confessions melted away [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ So pretty are your thoughts on this morning. *Hugs* to you, gal. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
BDC~ love the title and the poetry flows perfectly with it......beautifully done! SEA |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Too bad the confessions melted away...things might have turned quite intense otherwise.....strange isn't it how we would like to say certain things right from the heart but we get so scared of being rejected or feeling foolish in front of the one we are so in awe of....this is a great write.....ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I attempt to tell you the need to love you grows stronger within me How the sound of your voice cleanses my soul with serenity I could tell you how it feels when you visit my dreams When you cover me in the satin and lace moonbeams I started to tell you how it feels to be loved this way Then I looked into your eyes and my confessions melted away ====================== sometimes no words are needed... this is sooo tender and lovely me sweet such soft lingering emotions "When you cover me in the satin and lace moonbeams" so very very nice ..... beautiful confessions and expressions Holly-girl and how great to see your butterfly name here today you know what I always say... cant ever have too many butterflies love ya me SS me Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When you say it all without saying a word... *S* This is beautiful... what a perfect title! *S* |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
holly- wow~ this is so touching & tender. beautiful write as always. made me smile to see your name on the page today as always your writing touches deep within me...this reminded me of that song "when you say nothing at all" by allison kraus...sometimes words aren't needed take care love ya amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful thoughts to read...James |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
This is beautifully written...and I love the title. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
A delicate and tender weave my friend, take care! "I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Hello, my Butterfly kid, Boy, did this give me goose bumps!! Now, girl, you know I am too old for that!! I like the words and was surprised at the ending. Glad you came back. Love and hugs, Mom Butterfly |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I could tell you what the first touch set into motion The euphoric waves of sun kissed emotion I should tell you how it felt...your body so close to mine The way the flames of tempted desire and love entwine I needed tell you how that first moment was magically created The taste of your lips on mine...pure and heavenly fated I attempt to tell you the need to love you grows stronger within me How the sound of your voice cleanses my soul with serenity' This is beautiful beyond words, butterflies! I can't tell you how I can relate to this! Definitely going to keep this one!! Love it! sp everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, This was wonderfully written. So fresh and new are the emotions here. You surprised me at the end, but it was fitting I thought. Nice write. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
BDC--I like this muchly...beautiful write. Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
There are times when confessions are said through the eyes in silence and you have penned one of those moments superbly. Beautiful write in a very effective format my dear friend. I loved the images that come to mind and the wonderful images of tunnel vision misted around the edges of such clear thoughts. You shine when you have the inspiration and that is why your poetry has the power it does. Loved it much. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
BDC, This is both lovely and very tender. Well done. Michael Proust- "Love is space and time measured by the heart" |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, this one is excellent. . . you know what a sucker I am for poems like this. . . wonderful. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
So interesting.. Well done! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Thank you all so much for your always flowing praise, I never feel worthy of the compliments but I'm honored and touched by every one of you. Thank you again...from the bottom of my heart~ |
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