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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 2001-03-01 05:58 AM




I want so much to tell you how that first glance melted me
How that moment undid my soul...setting me completely free

I could tell you what the first touch set into motion
The euphoric waves of sun kissed emotion

I should tell you how it felt...your body so close to mine
The way the flames of tempted desire and love entwine

I needed tell you how that first moment was magically created
The taste of your lips on mine...pure and heavenly fated

I attempt to tell you the need to love you grows stronger within me
How the sound of your voice cleanses my soul with serenity

I could tell you how it feels when you visit my dreams
When you cover me in the satin and lace moonbeams

I started to tell you how it feels to be loved this way
Then I looked into your eyes and my confessions melted away





[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 03-01-2001).]

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-03-01 07:02 AM


ButterfliesDC~
So pretty are your thoughts on this morning.
*Hugs* to you, gal.
~*Marge*~


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2 posted 2001-03-01 08:34 AM


BDC~ love the title and the poetry flows perfectly with it......beautifully done! SEA
ethome
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3 posted 2001-03-01 08:44 AM


Too bad the confessions melted away...things might have turned quite intense otherwise.....strange isn't it how we would like to say certain things right from the heart but we get so scared of being rejected or feeling foolish in front of the one we are so in awe of....this is a great write.....ethome

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

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4 posted 2001-03-01 11:47 AM


I attempt to tell you the need to love you grows stronger within me
How the sound of your voice cleanses my soul with serenity

I could tell you how it feels when you visit my dreams
When you cover me in the satin and lace moonbeams

I started to tell you how it feels to be loved this way
Then I looked into your eyes and my confessions melted away
======================

sometimes no words are needed...
this is sooo tender and lovely me sweet
such soft lingering emotions

"When you cover me in the satin and lace moonbeams"

so very very nice .....
beautiful confessions and expressions Holly-girl
and how great to see your butterfly name here today
you know what I always say...
cant ever have too many butterflies
love ya me SS
me

Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain.
~Kahlil Gibran~

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5 posted 2001-03-01 02:23 PM


When you say it all without saying a word... *S* This is beautiful... what a perfect title! *S*
Aimster
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6 posted 2001-03-01 02:48 PM


holly-

wow~
this is so touching & tender. beautiful
write as always. made me smile to see
your name on the page today

as always your writing touches
deep within me...this reminded me
of that song "when you say nothing
at all" by allison kraus...sometimes
words aren't needed

take care
love ya
amy

"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."


JamesMichael
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7 posted 2001-03-01 03:16 PM


Beautiful thoughts to read...James
JLR
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8 posted 2001-03-01 03:54 PM


This is beautifully written...and I love the title.
EagleOne
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9 posted 2001-03-01 04:38 PM


A delicate and tender weave my friend, take care!

"I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly

Mother_Earth
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10 posted 2001-03-01 05:48 PM


Hello, my Butterfly kid,
Boy, did this give me goose bumps!! Now, girl, you know I am too old for that!! I like the words and was surprised at the ending. Glad you came back.
Love and hugs, Mom Butterfly

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11 posted 2001-03-01 07:28 PM


'I could tell you what the first touch set into motion
The euphoric waves of sun kissed emotion

I should tell you how it felt...your body so close to mine
The way the flames of tempted desire and love entwine

I needed tell you how that first moment was magically created
The taste of your lips on mine...pure and heavenly fated

I attempt to tell you the need to love you grows stronger within me
How the sound of your voice cleanses my soul with serenity'

This is beautiful beyond words, butterflies! I can't tell you how I can relate to this! Definitely going to keep this one!! Love it!

sp


everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips...
every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips...

Lone Wolf
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12 posted 2001-03-01 08:41 PM


BDC,

This was wonderfully written. So fresh and new are the emotions here. You surprised me at the end, but it was fitting I thought. Nice write.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Poeminister
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13 posted 2001-03-01 09:13 PM


BDC--I like this muchly...beautiful write.

Poeminister


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Mark Bohannan
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14 posted 2001-03-01 10:18 PM


There are times when confessions are said through the eyes in silence and you have penned one of those moments superbly. Beautiful write in a very effective format my dear friend. I loved the images that come to mind and the wonderful images of tunnel vision misted around the edges of such clear thoughts. You shine when you have the inspiration and that is why your poetry has the power it does. Loved it much.
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15 posted 2001-03-01 10:27 PM


BDC,

This is both lovely and very tender. Well done.

Michael


Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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16 posted 2001-03-01 10:27 PM


BDC, this one is excellent. . . you know what a sucker I am for poems like this. . .

wonderful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Voiceless
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17 posted 2001-03-01 10:29 PM


So interesting..
Well done!


~*Peachy Be*~

Butterflies_dont_cry
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18 posted 2001-03-02 10:16 PM


Thank you all so much for your always flowing praise, I never feel worthy of the compliments but I'm honored and touched by every one of you. Thank you again...from the bottom of my heart~
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