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You. . . (and your love. . . )
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You. . . (and your love. . . ) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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This is a poem from my collection called "The Lantern Bearers" It was on days like today that I felt the most alone When it seemed like the whole world was against me And the only thing I found to give me comfort was my pillow But now, you're here (even if only in spirit) Your love gives me courage to face the world (even on days like today) It gives me comfort for my tears And when I have to face the dark I no longer fear it So, let the world do its worst Even though I may not always win (it doesn't matter) Because I have something they can't take away Your love Thank you for being here And thank you for your love Because without you, I'd be crying in my pillow again now Looking for comfort and not finding it ------------------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Good Job. I'll look forward for more from The Lantern Bearers Collection. Thanks for sharing. A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I will take Walker's good job, and up the ante...excellent |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I started reading this earlier but couldn't get past the first dozen lines...for the pain of remembering. I read it again just now...got through the whole poem and realized that maybe I just need to accept that there are many different ways to be loved. And I shouldn't value one more than another. Thank you, I'm glad I came back. --RJ |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I enjoyed this very much thank you. ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
This is a fine read. Unfortunatly I am incapable of undertsanding much of your premise. Still, even I, can see value in your words. AT "For al these things, honor, dishonor, pain... happen to all men. They are not the mark of a virtuous life... or lack thereof" Marcus Aurelius |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Sven~that was awesome...some people are the best comfort....even if they aren't there. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
sven- as always very beautiful and touching! your writing as always leaves me in awe. i look forward to reading more from this collection if you care to share  take care m'friend amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this Sven...James |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Sven This was excellent. Spiritual comfort is often the best you can have. Good job on this write.  Garfield |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is touching and beautifully written Sven! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
It seems you have found what all the world hungers for. Sweetly said! *S*   mYsTiC |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sven~ tuggin on some heart strings here my dear........love this SEA |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
AD dear heart, More many more please do YOU realise how magical and beautiful this is love? Probably not, but it is truly outstanding, it has everything and I mean everything, I love it. It flows with perfection, it has style and grace. Utterly wonderful love. Take care love as always Bubbles And please AD can I have some more? (and soon you know I have no patience at all)  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
First of all, I love the title "The Lantern Bearers" has a very nice Celtic sound to it. Now, I liked this because of the total simplicity of the words but Sven, could you margin it, my eyes had a hard time following this across the page. I know, you don't ask for critique, but is there a specific reason for this form. Just wondering. Nice job. Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
very nice......very nice...sometimes I look forward to the comfort of my pillow...sigh...sometimes it is not and never will be enough......well said |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Sven - Saying such a great deal with so few words - =is and always will be in my mind -one of the principle marks of a great poet - and a great poem - With this poem you've accomplished this AND - moreover spoken to and for me - - To my treasure box !!! - |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I find myself reading this and feeling so sad. I'm glad you have your memory of her but I wish you were not left with just that. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hello everyone. . . thank you all for your wonderful words. . . I am truly amazed by them all. . . I wrote this a long time ago. . . I was 19, and in my first "real" love affair. . . the form is just an experiment of mine. . . I look at it now, and see that perhaps I could work on it a little (thanks Kathleen!! )If you'd like to know more. . . you can find the story here. . . /pip/Forum1/HTML/000113.html Thank you all my friends. . . ----------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Gosh Sven, you can remember being 19. You wrote poetry even then. Heck when I was 19 I was married and had my first child. Oh, this does make me feel old. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Sven, You were good even then, eh? I loved this! |
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