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Summer Dreaming---inspired by Packratmike
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Summer Dreaming---inspired by Packratmike |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Lay me down on sunbaked grass While cotton candy clouds drift past To hear the wings of a dragonfly As I dream under a summer sky. Set my feet in a crystal creek The tiny fishes my toes to seek Thousands of rainbows with each joyful slpash As sun caught droplets sparkle and flash. Fill me with a fresh summer wind The kind that sets kites soaring again And carries the scent of roses and rain And soothes that first sunburn pain. Set me in summer What more can I ask? Except maybe a playmate You up for the task? [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 02-28-2001).] |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Lay me down on sunbaked grass To watch cotton candy clouds drift past To hear the wings of a dragonfly As I dream here under a summer sky. What a familiar image you are drawing here. As a youngster in a small town in Illinois, this is exactly one of the things I would do. I loved going to the movies or playing with friends but I was just as content exploring and daydreaming in a creature-filled field of grass. I was never bored in Mother Nature's arms. I'm both happy and flattered that my poem inspired you to write "Summer Dreaming". That's one reason I really love PIP....the inspiration we all can provide to each other either through our poetry, challenges or words of encouragement is such a great benefit. Nice writing and imagery, Paula. Thanks Packratmike "HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Paula this is so beautiful...what wonderful word pictures....flowing and dreamy smooth. This is so full of the love for life...one of your best yet...I read it several times and I just love the atmosphere of this poem!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Hey Paula, I'm up for it! Loved the images. BTW I still love to do those things. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
conjured up a picnic in my mind.  Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
Wonderful imagery. I like the coquettish question at the end. Great! *wink*   |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like this so darn well I thought I'd give it another read......great write Paula!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula dear heart, this is utterly beautiful, so fabulous I'm lost in dreams of summer. Oh this is so good girlie, as wonderful as I knew it would be. Absolutely excellent you know I love it, and into my library it goes Wonderful work sister mine take care love as always Mushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is beautiful...James |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Maybe I'll try reading the happy ones today. But...I'll have to let you know about that butterfly. Right now, I might just swat the poor thing out of reflex. Ha! |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Very Good... I like it : ) Thank You ~~~Connie~~~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Packratmike...yes its fun to take inspiration from fellow poets...and thank you for your suggestions ethome...its wonderful having you share these images with me...thank you Dee...so do I every chance I get...thank you Kathleen...lol well peanut butter and jelly at least...thank you mystic...well summers not much fun without a playmate LOL...thank you ethome...lol sweetie read it as much as you like...have I told you lately how sweet you are? Hugs Marsha...Im glad I have you dreaming...you can thank Mike for that...he truly did inspire this...thanks sweet sis James...as are you sweet friend...thank you JLR...aawwwwwww...now cmon you really wouldnt swat it would ya? I hope I made you smile even just a little...hugs to you Zinsser...thank you so much [This message has been edited by Paula Finn (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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