Open Poetry #12 |
Reeling |
JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Reeling I need to find some words for this pain Of knowing what I will never know again. Knowing that I will never hear the words I love you And not think of you. This sentence seems too severe My sins…I didn’t think Were so grievous. I’d made it through so many years Oblivious to how deep the valleys of life could be But then I met you, and I loved you. The depths were incredible in beauty Canyons of color and stone The depths were drowned in intensity Flooding the dreams on our shore The depths were mad with passion Nullifying any reason ever known The depths were finally the death of us The sweetest end I’ll ever know So I’ll hold you now reeling in this pain I’ll talk quietly, you’ll go to sleep Hear me say You were every picture of love I ever imagined Every fear of loss I ever held Sleep now and know my arm's around you Protecting you From what I couldn’t before It’ll be okay, I promise I’m protecting you from me. [This message has been edited by JLR (edited 02-28-2001).] |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
A sad thing to have to feel we need to protect someone from ourselves. I think that we should let them make those decisions themselves. Maybe its a way of protecting ourselves too? I enjoyed reading this poem. As you can see, it made me think. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is very intense...and feeling....I wish you well... |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
R.J. I know this feeling all to well.....very intense and written from the heart. Keep up the good work! I'll ttys. ~Laura~ |
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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
filled with so much emotion... so sad, but well written |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Loving someone to this degree...its how love should be...but when one quits loving the pain is worse than anything imaginable...and nothing anyone can say makes a difference...just know you have friends here ok? |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I liked this very much....very sad though.....great job SEA |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
JLR- The depths.... I love those lines, very touching. When I read poems like this, I ask myself, and from my own experience, why do we love like this? and others cannot love? A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I think the poetry leading up to the end of this poem of yours JLR is just excellent.... such choice emotional expressions and so well placed in the flow of this bluesy piece. I really enjoy the creative ability of some of the poets that are coming into Passions lately...it really makes for such a cultivation of appreciation for the craft and where it can take the independent poetic mind.....good work here my friend....ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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