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What Kills A Love?
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England 
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What Kills A Love? What kills a love that’s perfect and whole? Is it all the lies that ripped apart the soul? Would it have survived in the seas of time? Would it have sailed on thinking all’s fine? What of the cuts of words spoken in hate? Would the words I’m sorry come far too late? What kills a loving and tenderly pure heart? Only words of lost chances dreams torn apart What murders a soul that is given in trust? Is it the slice of deceit that turns it to rust? Would it have danced on in its divine bliss? Would it have reveled forever in loves kiss? What of the pain that comes from those lies? Would hopes dream revive a spirit that dies? What murders the spirit that speaks within? Only words of painful lies that tear truths skin What destroys a heart that once loved true? Is it the torture of seeing betrayal’s blue hue? Would it have continued in its path of light? Would it have soared forever in desires flight? What of the chains that bite into its soft sigh? Would truth’s beauty be there in its sad eyes? What murders a soul that hears loves song? Only words so bitter with lies they taste wrong Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
great work my friend. I wished I knew what it was richard |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That would do it....all of the above.... |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
marsha, u are so inside of my head on this...its not even funny!! excellent writing as always. we are on the same page it seems these days my friend...same page. sad as that is. lies can definitely destroy even the strongest of love. thanks for posting this! take care and love ya amy  "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
I wish i knew the answers... for i know the feelings all too well. I don't think we'll ever truly know. Thanks for the read. "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" ~Broadway Musical RENT~ *Cassandra Roseen* |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
I really do not think this could have been said much better. You have answered your title's question so exremely well. I can see nothing to add. Lies more lies, betrayel, yes what murders the heart that loves? And it is murder. I am glad you had no compunction in naming things as they are. My sincerest compliments. This to my library goes. Thank you, this expression means more to me than you will ever know. AT "Decisions are Dominoes. Pause to reflect, before you set them in motion. [This message has been edited by ATelamon (edited 02-27-2001).] |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
Indifference Dennis |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I have to agree with Dennis...indifference kills...great write here girlie |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
 Very well written. "The secret of change is to focus all of your energy, not on fighting the old, but on building the new. Socrates |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
agreeing with dreamkeeper. . . well written. . . but sad. . .  -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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inyourdreams Junior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 10paradise |
all of those things can kill a love, but i think the greatest thing that can kill a love is doubt and words spoken critically.... trust is hard to hold and it's the most vital thing in a relationship... sometimes people start doubting the love of the other and become too demanding and say hurtful things.... from 1 corinthians 13: "Love is patient, love is kind. It does not envy, it does not boast, it is not proud. Love is never rude. Love is not jealous, it is not self-seeking, it is not easily angered, and it keeps no record of wrongs. Love does not delight in evil but rejoices with the truth. There is no limit to love's forbearance, to its trust, its hope, its power to endure." true LOVE can handle all of it and this text says it all.... your poem was quite well written and i'm sure spoke for many.... i do believe if the above guidelines are followed, love can survive and flourish |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
yeah that's it! you've done it again! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Coldness, and distrust...well expressed. Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 02-28-2001).] |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
They have all beat me to what I want to say.. So i guess all i can say is.. Great! and I liked it! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Marsha - I would have many words to say about what kills a love. I sure would. But you have expressed it well in your writing. BC |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Well...if anyone has the complete list please forward it to me. A question that will take me back through the years. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
I would answer, but so many have said what needs be said...wherein, this makes you a bona fide poet....placing questions, seeking answers, letting others....give.... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Mushy, sad questions with no answers. Well composed and excellently put together. Now for the sequel what holds a love...please! Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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soozieque_28 Junior Member
since 2000-11-28
Posts 28Tennessee |
This feels so familiar..... |
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the romantic fanatic Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 26Spokane, WA U.S.A. |
ah, what could ruin the altruistic heart of youth? very nice...dark and touching. I like it! D-mon |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
What can I say but that I thank you all for reading this, and I also thank you for each for your words of wisdom. It seems to me that love will grow but you don't know if it's real love until it has weathered a few storms. So sail on in truth and love everyone, may you each one of you feel the kiss of light, the touch of an angel, and the peace of truth. May the sun always warm your face, your shadow fall behind you, and the road you are on rise up to meet you. May you never feel the pain of hunger or thirst, the loneliness of an empty soul or the loss of hope. And may you all know that somewhere sometime your words have touched a heart, lifted a spirit and brought a smile to a soul. Take care as always love and warm stuff Mushy   Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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