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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This may be hard for some to read. Last Hours Virginia Salter How long will your last hours haunt me and yet somehow I shant want forget for all the moments I had to share with you are precious for no more this side of heaven will I have met Your scream, in pain, “What are you trying to do to me!” when attempt was made to roll you on your side to feed or give drink from beside you was so terribly unsuccessful, though I tried The rale of death, how it does echo in the very sinew of my being your arms flailing as if your air was being swallowed by some monstrous creature we weren’t seeing Trying to speak to you, came no answer, only cries of pain that we should be so cruel to go lifting you to strive for your comfort when there seemed quite nothing we to do Then the realization your last moments were coming their imminence so vivid and foreseen I began “In the Garden” as a prayer for your soul, through your mind, did I sing As I sang the last words in my memory you gave up the ghost before my very eyes a vapor arose from your forehead as release of your life filled my sighs So final those minutes of your going no recanting all words said as rain how often had words gone out in loving were they enough to ease an ounce of our pain © August 30. 2000 Don't really know why I'm posting this. People have pretty much stopped reading my poetry, it seems. But here I am anyway. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Vas, You just keep writing, your doing fine. I do read your poetry but don't always respond. Forgive me. Sy |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
VAS: This poem for sure shows how you felt and feel about this person. I'm sorry you had and this person had to be in so much pain. I lost my mom when I was 12 so I know how it feels to lose someone you love. However, I didnt have to see her dieing day by day a little more. I cant imagine what that must be like. Hope things in time get better for you. Keep writing because the poems Ive read of yours have been very good. Take care. ~Lisa~ ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
Hey, I'm new here and I'm reading you. I'm not here to win a popularity contest !!! just write, I know how you feel, sometimes we try something new like this, and wonder why some get all of the glory! ha, I know why, my poems are amateur.....  on a more sensitive note, this touched me, it reminded me of when my mother died.....take care. [This message has been edited by Dennis (edited 03-03-2001).] |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
This reminded me of my cousin's death. Only 21, she was so strong before her illness and on her death bed,was so weak.Her last hours where very hard. Very touching poem, nicely written and expressed.And by the way I always read your poems, you're a good poet! A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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