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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I just had epiphany-- Look it up, you'll have one too-- I just caught a glimpse of me and as I did? I grinned--saw YOU--- each spark of hope, love denied every STUPID sigh I typed how weary, I, to drag my fate too bad. how sad. I'm one space late. and are my words for you? You bet. you're every thought unwritten yet... every simple rhyme become paint of palette's rising sun. Each color in a dream unfold to watch the teal becoming gold and every drop of silvered lake becomes a stream upon my face. each tear, a-puddled on my cheek rivulet of songs I speak. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ What a lovely piece - 'and are my words for you? You bet. you're every thought unwritten yet... every simple rhyme become paint of palette's rising sun. Each color in a dream unfold to watch the teal becoming gold and every drop of silvered lake becomes a stream upon my face.' *sigh* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
That's a beautiful poem.....a pleasure to read |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~  you know I think you are amazing? Well, I do! Wow, I just love this SEA |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Please keep writing along this vein, for it is golden... well done... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
One space late... In all the years of bemoaning my lousy timing and no-win situations, I never described it as well as those 3 words do... Great work! |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Serenity, Wonderful poetry painted not to late to catch my heart with beauty of your song, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
each spark of hope, love denied every STUPID sigh I typed how weary, I, to drag my fate too bad. how sad. I'm one space late. and are my words for you? You bet. you're every thought unwritten yet... every simple rhyme become paint of palette's rising sun. Each color in a dream unfold to watch the teal becoming gold and every drop of silvered lake becomes a stream upon my face. each tear, a-puddled on my cheek rivulet of songs I speak. ============================= when one was so far above and beyond their time ... they used to call prophets and geniuses stupid too.. "you're every thought unwritten yet... every simple rhyme become" "paint of palette's rising sun. Each color in a dream unfold to watch the teal becoming gold and every drop of silvered lake becomes a stream upon my face." anybody ever tell ya youre beautiful when youre "stupid"  Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain. ~Kahlil Gibran~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
the poem's great, but "never let them see you sweat" honest, hold your head up and say "you know, the next poem is gonna be for someone else! Dennis |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Time to call in the publishers on this one. I am really on my knees here beggin' ya to put together a bunch of pages and have them bound in a leather binding. Your talent needs to find itself on the shelves of some stores real quick my friend. This was a unique read of unmistakable serenity charm. Now don't forget, I want an autographed copy with picture on the cover. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Celeste I can't ever imagine you being one space late...you're way too clever dear girl.....but I can imagine you having many epiphanys as you mull over the forces of life you know...love, justice, wisdom and power God's attributes.... the whole world needs to cultivate those more...but you seem to have a great talent for bringing ones imperfections to the fore and making them a rewarding part of life in a poetic way...very nicely done!...your poet buddy ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Yeah well...you know I know...and you know you could have written this for me as well...damn girl stay out of my head ok? LOVE YA!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow, wow, I love this!! I want to agree with Mark here, please put together a book, and I want a signed copy!! One space late, story of my life summed up perfectly. One more Wow for good measure! Sandra |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Serenity, This is beautiful! I can relate to many silverlaked tears streaming down my cheeks as well... Elise |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I do want to thank everybody for your very flattering replies...and yep, I'm a little late!  For all who have been concerned, I'm okay. (just dogding the ogre) thanks again! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'and are my words for you? You bet. you're every thought unwritten yet... every simple rhyme become paint of palette's rising sun. Each color in a dream unfold to watch the teal becoming gold and every drop of silvered lake becomes a stream upon my face.' Fantastic write, serenity! You've got some way with words...I truly admire this! Into the library with this one! sp  do I believe we'd be better off apart? can I see my world without you in it? baby, not for a single minute... |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I read this days ago, wanted to respond, then lost track. Glad it came back around. I enjoyed and related much! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Feel like dodging him in a new continent? Since I missed you here I could always find a 'space' for ya in NZ lol hugs dear this is one fine piece of writing...  K...and I have found a lifetime can be lived in one moment... |
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