Open Poetry #12 |
Silencing the Soul |
Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
SILENCING THE SOUL Who writes this day that I may not? This question I would ask., In pitied passion's afterthought Of love's trivial task. With lies that quenched my starving soul All painted to a page, If glimpsed but from the plains of Scheol Or bound by lover's rage, The dribble and the drabble now All seem quiet refrain, In shadows where I wonder how I ever stood such pain. But I, by far a better man, If silenced by the deed, (Ink spilled, ever a talisman Of grief beyond the need), Now, quietly, will walk away, And bear my lover's cross. To find my pen another day, And not recount the loss. Michael Anderson But dreams of those who dream as I, Aspiringly, are damned and die. EAP [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-26-2001).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
So what you're saying is that red is a better color for '67 Vettes? Coolies Mike - for one who has an unworking pen, it writes quite well, eh? C |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Michael, amazing write as always by your pen and the poet controlling it. Parker |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I have to go with Chris on this one (surprise surprise)...very well done Michael. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
So good to read you after waking up from a 6 hour nap! What can I say about this? The rhyme is perfect, it's well crafted, it's ethereal quality brings out the poet in me! I didn't scan this, hardly ever scan another poet's work, I write by ear, but I have relied on versification more and more and there just seemed to be a beat missing in the fourth line, but I think it depends on how one pronounces and draws out the word "trivial." Wonderful crafted poem, here Michael, I'm impressed as always. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
If I could write like this, I'd be a happy woman...sigh.....you are the best. |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I enjoyed this very much! A great poem! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
(Ink spilled, ever a talisman Of grief beyond the need), fantastic line, Michael. Your poetry continues to grow with you. corinne |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Mickael, this is fantastic. I really enjoyed it. Sandra |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I echo that fantastic...excellent writing. Poeminister |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Michael ... I could read your work forever and a day ... beautifully done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Christopher, that's what I like about you - you always know exactly what I'm talking about. Btw, I want my pen back - I know it was you who stole it now!!! Parker, sincerest thanks. Elizabeth, even if you agree with Chris, you should never admit to it!!! Kathleen, thank you for the overview. I write by ear myself and sometimes I tend to stretch syllables - bad habit I picked up from writing songs in my youth. Still, I have reread the poem aloud and the fourth line seems o.k. to me, but then again I am anything but an expert. Maybe it is the "trivial" thing. Do know that I appreciate your compliments and critique to the fullest in any case. PdV, it took me many years of deep depression to write as I do. I would never wish that on anyone, especially you - I treasure your friendship too much. You are one of the people who helped me past that stage in life, that should make you happy above all else. Voiceless, pleased to meet you, an thank you. I don't get to the forums as much as I used to so let me offer you a belated welcome. I will look for some of your work soon. Corinne, I just wish my poetry would catch up with me some day... Sandra & Poeminister, so glad you enjoyed. Kit, that's quite a compliment - thank you... And thank you all so much. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-27-2001).] |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
michael - I did like the ink line. wonderfully done, and uniquely crafted. and about that "trivial" topic, it's a male thing. tri-vi-al, but I'm feelin it. lol you guys are making me want to leave work and curl up on my couch with my notebook and write tonight. "There were times in my life when I was going insane tryin to walk through the pain. When I lost my grip and I hit the floor yeah I thought I could le |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
Michael, Even though I am new at Passions. I already know that I love to read your poetry. Your writing is excellent. |
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