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Michael
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0 posted 2001-02-26 01:06 PM


SILENCING THE SOUL

Who writes this day that I may not?
This question I would ask.,
In pitied passion's afterthought
Of love's trivial task.

With lies that quenched my starving soul
All painted to a page,
If glimpsed but from the plains of Scheol
Or bound by lover's rage,

The dribble and the drabble now
All seem quiet refrain,
In shadows where I wonder how
I ever stood such pain.

But I, by far a better man,
If silenced by the deed,
(Ink spilled, ever a talisman
Of grief beyond the need),

Now, quietly, will walk away,
And bear my lover's cross.
To find my pen another day,
And not recount the loss.

Michael Anderson


But dreams of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned and die.


EAP


[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-26-2001).]

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Christopher
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1 posted 2001-02-26 01:39 PM


So what you're saying is that red is a better color for '67 Vettes?

Coolies Mike - for one who has an unworking pen, it writes quite well, eh?

C

Parker
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2 posted 2001-02-26 04:17 PM


Michael, amazing write as always by your pen and the poet controlling it.

Parker

Elizabeth
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3 posted 2001-02-26 05:26 PM


I have to go with Chris on this one (surprise surprise)...very well done Michael.
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4 posted 2001-02-26 06:32 PM


So good to read you after waking up from a 6 hour nap!

What can I say about this? The rhyme is perfect, it's well crafted,
it's ethereal quality brings out the poet in me!

I didn't scan this, hardly ever scan another poet's work, I write by ear,
but I have relied on versification more and more and there just seemed to be a beat missing in the fourth line, but I think it depends on how one pronounces and draws out the word "trivial."

Wonderful crafted poem, here Michael, I'm impressed as always.


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and the sun drips honey."
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Poet deVine
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5 posted 2001-02-26 07:48 PM


If I could write like this, I'd be a happy woman...sigh.....you are the best.
Voiceless
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6 posted 2001-02-26 07:51 PM


I enjoyed this very much!
A great poem!


~*Peachy Be*~

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7 posted 2001-02-26 08:01 PM


(Ink spilled, ever a talisman
Of grief beyond the need),

fantastic line, Michael. Your poetry continues to grow with you.

corinne

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8 posted 2001-02-26 08:30 PM


Mickael, this is fantastic. I really enjoyed it.
Sandra

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9 posted 2001-02-26 08:33 PM


I echo that fantastic...excellent writing.

Poeminister

Kit McCallum
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10 posted 2001-02-26 10:36 PM


Michael ... I could read your work forever and a day ... beautifully done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Michael
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11 posted 2001-02-27 04:19 AM


Christopher, that's what I like about you - you always know exactly what I'm talking about.  Btw, I want my pen back - I know it was you who stole it now!!!

Parker, sincerest thanks.

Elizabeth, even if you agree with Chris, you should never admit to it!!!

Kathleen, thank you for the overview.  I write by ear myself and sometimes I tend to stretch syllables - bad habit I picked up from writing songs in my youth.  Still, I have reread the poem aloud and the fourth line seems o.k. to me, but then again I am anything but an expert.  Maybe it is the "trivial" thing.  Do know that I appreciate your compliments and critique to the fullest in any case.

PdV, it took me many years of deep depression to write as I do.  I would never wish that on anyone, especially you - I treasure your friendship too much.  You are one of the people who helped me past that stage in life, that should make you happy above all else.  

Voiceless, pleased to meet you, an thank you.  I don't get to the forums as much as I used to so let me offer you a belated welcome.  I will look for some of your work soon.

Corinne, I just wish my poetry would catch up with me some day...

Sandra & Poeminister, so glad you enjoyed.

Kit, that's quite a compliment - thank you...


And thank you all so much.


Michael


[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-27-2001).]

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12 posted 2001-02-27 05:17 AM


michael -

I did like the ink line. wonderfully done, and uniquely crafted. and about that "trivial" topic, it's a male thing. tri-vi-al, but I'm feelin it. lol you guys are making me want to leave work and curl up on my couch with my notebook and write tonight.




"There were times in my life when I was going insane tryin to walk through the pain. When I lost my grip and I hit the floor yeah I thought I could le

Red-uni
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13 posted 2001-02-27 12:36 PM


Michael,
Even though I am new at Passions. I already know that I love to read your poetry. Your writing is excellent.

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