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keeping score (my first time.... here)
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keeping score (my first time.... here) |
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inyourdreams Junior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 10paradise |
ok, i'm here and ready! let's go eat out. where's the raw bar? lie down in my arms, baby, i'll love you like no other! i'll kiss your heart and take each part of you inside my soul until we lose control! remember the day at the alley when i did the splits down the aisle, landing chinese style and held up both my hands like i got six points, the whole league staring at me, and you loving every minute of it? TOUCHDOWN! i'm ready for that extra point so hold on tight! you might just like it. those shoes were slick and so were you, you sweet-tongued devil! i tried for a strike but only got a split, since you kept making beautiful comments from behind about my long legs and yours intertwined, sitting in that chair keeping score. i couldn't figure out if it was bowling or football, but who cared, anyway? you played me right and i want to play again. i'll join your tournament any day! i'll come into your league, so field my words, because i wouldn't refuse your interference or any illegal procedure you might perform! hey! and we don't even need a referee unless he's got a camera and wants to do a photoshoot. you keep score, ok? i like it when you do that! i'm gonna get inside your shell. i absolutely love a raw bar at the bowling alley in the middle of football season. give me your pigskin and your pins. i'll bowl you over first and ten. -by inyourdreams february, 25, 2001 *dream on, baby, dream on me* |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
inyourdreams H H H H O O O O T T T T!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Need a cold shower after this one. Passing interference on you. You get the yellow flag (lol ha ha ha). This was a great first write. I hope you like it here at Passions. Welcome, welcome, welcome. By the way, just wondering, was this in your dreams? Garfield |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I, too, loved this. Very good first post. But you might might want to take a look at the 'Adults' forum if you're going to get any more descriptive. Liked this alot! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Very interesting first post..........  Welcome ~SEA |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Hey Hey Hey! Welcome! Nice poem, it catchs your attention and trust me it keeps! Well done! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey welcome to Passions! This is really great writing!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Enjoyed the read. Welcome to Passions!! |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
This was very original! Loved it! "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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inyourdreams Junior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 10paradise |
ggrn3- thank you for the welcome. enjoy your shower. yes, this is a dream, but also based on a true story. JLR- i like to be descriptive. i'll check out the Adults forum. thank you. SEA- thank you for your comment. Voiceless- Thank you. I'm glad i could hold your attention. ethome- that's a very nice thing to say. thank you. saxoness- i try to be original. thank you. |
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