keeping score (my first time.... here)

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inyourdreams
Junior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 10
paradise

0 posted 2001-02-25 04:16 PM

ok, i'm here and ready!
let's go eat out.
where's the raw bar?
lie down in my arms, baby,
i'll love you like no other!
i'll kiss your heart
and take each part
of you inside my soul
until we lose control!

remember the day at the alley
when i did the splits down the aisle,
landing chinese style
and held up both my hands
like i got six points,
the whole league
staring at me,
and you loving
every minute of it?

TOUCHDOWN!
i'm ready for that
extra point
so hold on tight!
you might
just like it.

those shoes were slick
and so were you,
you sweet-tongued devil!

i tried for a strike
but only got a split,
since you kept making
beautiful comments
from behind
about my long legs
and yours intertwined,
sitting in that chair
keeping score.

i couldn't figure out
if it was bowling or football,
but who cared, anyway?
you played me right
and i want to play again.

i'll join your tournament
any day! i'll come
into your league,
so field my words,
because i wouldn't refuse
your interference
or any illegal procedure
you might perform!

hey! and we don't
even need a referee
unless he's got a camera
and wants to do a photoshoot.

you keep score, ok?
i like it when you do that!
i'm gonna get inside your shell.
i absolutely love a raw bar
at the bowling alley
in the middle of
football season.

give me your pigskin
and your pins.
i'll bowl you over
first and ten.

-by inyourdreams
february, 25, 2001

*dream on, baby, dream on me*

ggrn3
Member

since 2000-08-17

Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.

1 posted 2001-02-25 06:11 PM

inyourdreams
H H H H O O O O T T T T!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Need a cold shower after this one. Passing interference on you. You get the yellow flag (lol ha ha ha). This was a great first write. I hope you like it here at Passions. Welcome, welcome, welcome.
By the way, just wondering, was this in your dreams?

Garfield

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

2 posted 2001-02-25 06:38 PM

I, too, loved this. Very good first post. But you might might want to take a look at the 'Adults' forum if you're going to get any more descriptive. Liked this alot!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-02-25 06:46 PM

Very interesting first post..........

Welcome ~SEA

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

4 posted 2001-02-25 08:45 PM

Hey Hey Hey!
Welcome!
Nice poem,
it catchs your attention
and trust me it keeps!

Well done!

~*Peachy Be*~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2001-02-26 12:10 PM

Hey welcome to Passions! This is really great writing!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

6 posted 2001-02-26 12:11 PM

Enjoyed the read. Welcome to Passions!!

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

7 posted 2001-02-26 03:45 AM

This was very original! Loved it!

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

inyourdreams
Junior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 10
paradise

8 posted 2001-02-26 11:33 AM

ggrn3- thank you for the welcome. enjoy your shower. yes, this is a dream, but also based on a true story.

JLR- i like to be descriptive. i'll check out the Adults forum. thank you.

SEA- thank you for your comment.

Voiceless- Thank you. I'm glad i could hold your attention.

ethome- that's a very nice thing to say. thank you.

saxoness- i try to be original. thank you.

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