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Rapture of the Rose (thanks to Poeminister)
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Rapture of the Rose (thanks to Poeminister) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I know! I shouldn't post so many poems...I'll stop..but it's been an unusual day for me...the dam that held back the flow of my muse burst...I'm not saying any of these is good, but at least I'm writing..and for that, I thank you all. Rapture of the Rose Delicate violet hidden in peaceful wooded vale sister of the daffodil and teller of this tale Bouquets of love unclaimed lay moldering in the hedge familial flowers breathing soft and browning on the edge Tossed from a fleeing bride whose groom had been untrue carelessly thrown from a car tied to a billet-doux Goodbye words dotted with a tear spoke of pain and lovers lost honesty was the method dying flowers now the cost Who knows the terrible cost of the rapture of the rose who pays when a lover lies and when a lover knows |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
but of course the answer to writing is writing . . . you must. I enjoyed this, particularly the first stanza. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Well, you can do it, you're in control! Yes, muse knows no limit, write on! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you for you kind words..Yes.I like that first stanza also..not sure of the rest, I may revise it someday.  |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
PoetDeVine--Love it...these are sure coming out of you quickly and I love them all...very nicely done. Poeminister |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, Sharon!!! Glad to see you writing again!!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow. You've my total admiration, Ms. deVine! You are not only an excellent writer, but I love the clever twists to your ideas! Keep 'em rolling, lady....  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
PDV........you write all you want!!! really liked the lines.......... who pays when a lovers lies and when a lover knows.........helen |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Yes, please write and write some more. Your muse is speaking quite well for you and of course this piece inspired by one of Passions most talented and wonderful poets could not be anything other than great. Excellent write and I loved not only the first stanza, but the third and fourth ones held quite an impact as well. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
just let it come deVine. . . let the words flow. . . wonderful. . .  ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Everyone pays the price of betrayal... even the flowers who would loan such beauty to us, given the chance. *S* This is lovely, PDV! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Rule #1 Never stop a muse (Especially when you're writing like this) Keep writing and posting Liz |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sharon, Beautifully done, I am trying this same phrase out and finding it difficult, yours simple glides so wonderfully, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Ms. deVine, it's wonderful to see your poetry again! I loved the imagery and the simplistic flow...keep em coming my friend!  *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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