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The View from Your Eyes
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The View from Your Eyes |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
 Yes, my darling...help me to see the way you do; Show me where you see the rainbow of color In the most overcast of skies. Every note is inspiration...I listen intently to each word, Passing like soothing streams through your lips, Saturating the desert of my existence. Perhaps if I could look through your eyes, Those impressive windows of insight, I would not miss you quite so severely-- Each time I draw breath, Every night while I wait in vain For peace to honor me with its presence. I’d so willingly leave it all behind For the assurance of your radiant expression Every time I open and close my eyes. I know very well how merciless fate has been; I will admit that mountains of disapproval Stand jeeringly before us. But, my love, there is one thing Fate seems to have overlooked In its quest to block the light from your soul... The affect of your eyes on my heart Has released a surge of passion And inundated me with a lifetime of determination. So, my darling, help me to see the way you do... Encase my soul in your levity And teach me to paint my world with your brilliant style. -kh 02/01 everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Neat!! I really like it! Thank you!  ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I dont think you need to be taught to "paint" anything ... your doing very well on your own... excellent imagery SP ... as well as expression of longing and devotion very cool write jm Love is my religion, I believe in nothing else. To find that inspiration, live that inner vision. Love is my religion...I believe in you. ~T Kimmel |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
This so beautifully says...love. 'I know very well how merciless fate has been; I will admit that mountains of dissaproval Stand jeeringly before us... In it's quest to block the light from your soul... The affect of your eyes on my heart' I really enjoyed and related to this. Thanks. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Even if we know how to "paint", we can always learn new or better ways. Very nice piece! A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"The affect of your eyes on my heart Has released a surge of passion And inundated me with a lifetime of determination." ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Romantic.......unbelieveably romantic........wonderfully done!! SEA |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
OMG I'm beginning to look for snowpants every time I feel blue...this is stunning, thank you for drying my sorrow today and putting a smile on my face! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Romantic affections with exquiste imagery you've weaved into this...very nicely done. Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 02-23-2001).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
kris, this was just beautiful my friend! I am just watching on the sidelines as you find your wings and soar evermore to the heavens...u got big smiles from me...truly lovely write! such utter love and devotion pouring from that sweet soul and heart of yours--i am loving seeing you like this love ya girlie, aims ~~~~~ "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Wow guys... Voiceless: thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! JM: oh, now...stop it...  but, really...thank you, my friend, for the wonderful reply, as always! glad you liked it!!  JLR: thanks for reading! I'm glad you liked this! walker: yes, you are right...thank you, my friend!  SEA: why thank you (from one romantic to another!) Kathleen: well, I am very flattered that you think so highly of my work...it means so much to me! you are so sweet! thank you so much for your wonderful reply! Poeminister: thank you so much for your comments! I am glad you could stop by!! Aims: big smiles, eh? well, nothing makes me happier than to give you big smiles! I thank you, my dear friend, for your continued support and wonderful compliments! Yer da best, girlie!! -e ~~~~~sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now I have to agree with JM on this one. I don't believe you need to be taught anything about putting a pen to your canvas world. This was both lovely in images and thoughts and so lovingly written with a passion of desire and peace both at the same time. Now that takes a real feel for releasing your emotions and you do it very well. Excellent write my friend. |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
beautiful love.......I loved this! Nice job, Snow Pants! "The secret of change is to focus all of your energy, not on fighting the old, but on building the new. Socrates |
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