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Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

0 posted 2001-02-23 01:08 AM

Come,
climb a tree
with me.
Let's rake leaves
then hold hands
while we jump
into the pile.
Or spend lazy afternoons
playing by the creek.
Come,
my friend,
let's be children again,
for a little while.

What do you think? I still have a lot to learn about free verse, so teach me what you can.

thanks,
Dee

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Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-02-23 01:19 AM

Dee~

I can shinny up a tree with the best of 'em -
Shedding perhaps some light
on Darwin's Theory Of Evolution !

You free-versed this just fine.

Keep it up !
Write it down !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

2 posted 2001-02-23 01:24 AM

Thanks Marge, I thought about this topic on the way to work and it seemed a better option than work!
Dee

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Bec
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since 2001-02-23

Posts 475
Canberra

3 posted 2001-02-24 12:28 PM

For your first free-verse, this is really nice, images of children on weekends!

Bec

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

4 posted 2001-02-24 02:51 AM

"Come,
my friend,
let's be children again,
for a little while."

I do love this one, it conjures up some delightful images of days long since past. Thank you my friend!

"I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

5 posted 2001-02-24 05:54 AM

Thanks Bec, it's about time you got here.

Eddie, great memories aren't they, my friend. Thanks for dropping in.

Dee

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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2001-02-25 04:50 PM

Dee--I haven't climbed a tree in a long time...but the leaf jumping is lots of fun...loved the attitude of this poem!

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

7 posted 2001-02-25 05:33 PM

Glad you liked it Martie. I thought it would be a fun thing to do but could you imagine the looks we would get doing some of that stuff. I think it would be worth it just to see some peoples faces.

Dee

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

8 posted 2001-02-26 05:31 AM

Dee, personally I like jumping in puddles, but this poem makes me want to re-visit my childhood. Well done!
Write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

9 posted 2001-02-26 06:19 PM

Kethry, puddles are good fun too. Thanks for reading.
Dee

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kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

10 posted 2001-02-26 08:38 PM

the title pulled me in..what else can i say?

thanx for sharing

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

11 posted 2001-02-26 09:50 PM

Glad you liked it

Dee

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Suetang
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since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

12 posted 2001-03-31 08:11 AM

Hello Dee
Nice to see another Aussie on here. My name is Sue from Melbourne and I loved your poem. A lovely gentleman named Michael Auguste told me what a wonderful lady you were and that I should read some of your poems, so here I am. I have only been writing for 3 months and I get so much encouragement from so many wonderful people that it inspires me to do more. Take care......Sue

Suetang

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

13 posted 2001-04-01 01:20 AM

Hi Dee,

Of course you know that I love this. :-) I'm a big fan of your poetry and have always been. I miss talking with you. I always enjoy it so much. Take care, my sweet friend and be happy. ((((hugs))))

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

14 posted 2001-04-01 03:45 AM

Sue, glad you liked my poem. I know you'll like it here, it's a wonderful place full of wonderful people. Thanks for reading my work.

Michael, what else can I say to you but

Dee

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RMW
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since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

15 posted 2001-04-01 11:06 PM

Dee...I think this is very nice. I especially like the last line..."..for a little while.." It has a sad reality to it. Bob

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

16 posted 2001-04-02 08:18 PM

Thanks Bob, yeah it is sad that we can only be kids "for a little while" cause I don't want to grow up!

Thanks for reading.
Dee

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