Open Poetry #12 |
Blue Temptation ( a try at free verse) |
Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
"Blue Tempation" Sitting here as ocean breezes float through my window-- Thoughts of you drift lazily through my mind Time stands still--as I think over the depth of what we share Sun setting low as she winks at me through the hues of blue sky Fantasy is what I want to label this Chalking it up to the fact that it's the mystery Though I know it's more than that Feeling the connection overtake me--I surrender The beauty of you washing over me As rain washes over the Earth restoring it Heavens parting allowing rays of sunbeam To reach my delicate heart What ifs linger all around us Temptation softly sleeping around the corner And we know-- Yes we know She may wake up at any moment Though I've never touched you Late at night, sometimes I feel your skin Pressing against mine As our hearts beat in unison to music only we can hear I sit here wondering Do you feel what I feel-- Or is just a fantasy, that only exists for me Then I realize, no it's not...its temptation Like the stars tempt poets to fall in love "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
EXCELLENT FREE VERSE! I applaud!!!!!!!! Gentle and thoughtful. I loved it! "The secret of change is to focus all of your energy, not on fighting the old, but on building the new. Socrates |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Amy dear heart absolutely beautiful always you write so wonderfully well, into my library with this it is an absolute gem. And yes it truly is wonderful, there is always some sunshine after the rain. Take care love as always Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I sit here wondering Do you feel what I feel-- Or is just a fantasy, that only exists for me Then I realize, no it's not...its temptation Like the stars tempt poets to fall in love' Aims, Aims, Aims...whew...this is great! These are my favorite lines, but the whole poem is fantastic! Excellent free verse, m'friend!! (ocean breezes...hmph...as I stare out the window to a BLIZZARD ) -e ~~~~~~~~ everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I think this is so much more than a mere try........... this is WONDERFUL!! SEA |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Aimster - if this was just a try, I'm waiting to see what comes out of your pen when you try one for real. Very nice. BC |
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