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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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lost children freestyle Once I laid in bed I saw all the gold in the place where I don’t go because I’m scared to share all my love. I don’t want to be hurt and left dead upon the snowy field of trees and white dust, blue sky and my crying eyes. I just want to share but I am so afraid the sky will snow. It seems so cold all alone. And the clouds are restless like my heart like my arms like my gift of gold that is all a dream. When I lay my head down close my eyes in this map I made you can find me by a river that doesn’t flow the sky, your eyes and I know. oh, empty shores adore. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Once I laid in bed I saw all the gold in the place where I don’t go because I’m scared to share all my love. I don’t want to be hurt and left dead upon the snowy field of trees and white dust, blue sky and my crying eyes. ===================== When I lay my head down close my eyes in this map I made you can find me by a river that doesn’t flow the sky, your eyes and I know. oh, empty shores adore. ==================== (with the exception of Marties tribute poems of her daughter Michelle).... its been a while since a poem made me cry... from your pen to my heartstrings... "close my eyes in this map I made you can find me by" hugs to ya myBSQpoet ...  Love is my religion, I believe in nothing else. To find that inspiration, live that inner vision. Love is my religion...I believe in you. ~T Kimmel |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Beautiful. You have an original style that I really enjoy. "snowy trees and white dust, blue sky and my crying eyes" - really nice writing. You've captured this emotion well. Nice job! "The secret of change is to focus all of your energy, not on fighting the old, but on building the new. Socrates |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow........this is so emotional........fantastic  SEA |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, everyone. There was a song on a cd I was humming the melody to, and this came out. It's so completely unguarded, hence the title. Mike |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
well, that's the secret-unguarded does look good on you, this is nice! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
well, that's the secret-unguarded does look good on you, this is nice! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
what a wonderful poem very sad, but i love your style |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mike, hello. I'm awfully glad I had a chance to read your poem tonight. It is both grand and intimate, tender in its scope of delicate imagery and vulnerability. If you have an opportunity, please read my poem "Night Unending" ~ I believe we may have been of like mind while writing these two. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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