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In a Box of Treasures
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In a Box of Treasures |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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In a Box of Treasures this is where my soul lies in a box of treasures no longer mine, but his it’s his box of treasures for the taking out and looking upon to finger some lace to linger over scents he touches the brooch once worn and fiddles with some rings holds up some gee-gaws and fancy, frilly “things” he remembers the day he bought those golden loops and memories resurge as his thoughts recoup a bit of scarf, my scent is there a strand of scarlet round lock of hair old photos, worn thin he still sees the smiles therein pretty eyes, warm and green a captured glance that was serene this was the necklace that I wore he wonders who he keeps it for and that was a bracelet that graced my wrist which he holds clenched in his fist and then he picks up a lonely key and looks at it quite longingly and wonders what it could have fit his memories unravel they won’t quit he wonders of the key inside that little treasure box he’s searched and looked all around he has yet to find the lock he’ll never know and is scared to ask as his thoughts take him to task for she is gone but not from his memory but still he wonders of the key….. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 02-22-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
.........wonderful, touching, and a real tear jerker............. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
awwww this was really a nice read girl. I like *wistful* poetry  ~H A woman has got to love a bad man once or twice in her life to be thankful for a good one. Mae West (1892-1980) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh my goodness Sunshine, this one made me all teary eyes and that is the honest truth... I enjoyed the poem immensely it brings back a memory I have of someone dear who kind of went through a similar experience... This is innocently touching without any warning the poem gently tugs at the heart... I just loved it Sunshine and it's a keepsake for me in my "TreasureBox" library... Thank you PoetFriend ~coco~ |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Thank you for writing this it was really neat... ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
what a creative and unique perspective to write from Sun ... very cool idea .. and wonderful detailed imagery here. very well done poetess of sun  Love is my religion, I believe in nothing else. To find that inspiration, live that inner vision. Love is my religion...I believe in you. ~T Kimmel |
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zoe Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 34 |
very very well done......sigh...sad yes, but romance usually is..... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Reminds me of how long they stay around in our memories...I have a picture on my wall of me and the girlfriend that I took to the senior prom many years ago...her name was Billy Jean Smith...she was an angel...it always brings back good memories...James |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari dear heart, there is a reward for goodness, because I just found in in your box of treasures. Wonderful, (Yes I have! I've been as good as gold today, honestly  ) well okay goodish Utterly divinely wonderful, yes I love it of course.  Take care love as always Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
a real surprise from the sunshine lady - and we're always surprised to find our love may have had some sort of life - outside us I love it~S~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all for enjoying this one with me..... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How can a poem like this one not be enjoyed? It is a beautiful read, Sunshine....... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is such excellent writing Karilea...makes me want to shed a tear or two...but you have the ability to do that somehow.....great work dear poet lady!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
you've done a nice job with this one, sunshine...very sad...but so well written |
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Ixtab Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 105MEXICAlpan de las tunas |
watch out before giving your completness to anyone. even if they are your love. nice. |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Interesting metaphor, yet the persona itself sees that whihc the box contains. Therefore that must be seperate than the individual items. Ahh just some metaphysical mumbo-liked the poem very much. AT "Time is merely change. It neither enslaves nor determines us. It is instead our opportunity for self-definition" |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah my friends...your kind words lift this little want-to-be-a poet's heart....thank you... |
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