Thank you's, merry go rounds and I

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jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

0 posted 2001-02-22 12:17 PM

ok, lolol, *laughing only at me* but this is my first attempt at any sort of rhyme scheme...go easy on me ok?

Thank you's, merry go rounds and I

It pleases me to thank you now
even though you didn't do it on purpose
its just the way of you to make people smile
but you helped me
find my way back
inside

A long time ago I used to think
someday I would be happy
dizzy as I might have been
I reached for the golden ring
only to find out
the merry go round
lied

my heart stopped reaching
tight fisted it punished me for trying

and one day my eyes just stopped seeing
they were tired of crying

I wrapped me up inside
folded in the extras
and tied the strings
tight

I forgot that skipping rope
was playing, I forgot the carefree
days of swinging
feet high, touching the
light

I forgot that smiles were
free for the taking
that they were meant to be
enjoyed

I even forgot that deserts-
my prescription for sanity
are very pleasurably
employed

For the lunchtime treats
that too long I
denied
I have you to thank my friend
your smile reached the me
I tried to hide

[This message has been edited by jellybeans (edited 02-23-2001).]

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

1 posted 2001-02-22 12:23 PM

I think your friend found the ultimate flavor of jellybean when they opened the bag with your friendship inside. Wonderful write and for your first attempt at this style, I must say..........ya did really really good.

Well done. Loved the read.

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

2 posted 2001-02-22 12:27 PM

thank you mark, coming from a poet of your talent, and you just being 'you' your comments make me smile

lol I edited, cause I said poet of your 'stature'...and then I thought you might think I was calling you tall instead of a good writer......rofg...and I don't even know how tall you are...*shakes her head* but I do know you are a great poet

[This message has been edited by jellybeans (edited 02-22-2001).]

Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

3 posted 2001-02-22 11:24 PM

well it's good to know you're not skipping lunch mz beans....

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

4 posted 2001-02-23 09:35 AM

well I went hungry for a long time, til i remembered how good they were

thanks for coming by

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2001-02-23 12:46 PM

Your rhyme scheme might not be the usual, but it works well... I'm not about to laugh (well, at least not at your rhyme scheme... those lunches are another matter! LOL)Ya done good, gal...

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

6 posted 2001-02-23 02:39 PM

*very very innocent look* me?????
my poem gave you that evil grin....?????
I think not......you forget I know you too well.....I won't say a thing about RR and rasberries ok?
ooopppss *covers her mouth and sneaks away*

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

7 posted 2001-02-23 06:09 PM

Maybe we should all look back or at least smile a bit more!
It was fun to read!
Thanks!

~*Peachy Be*~

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

8 posted 2001-02-26 10:09 AM

thanks voiceless, and yep I am at a point where I am trying to find mine, they have been buried too long...sigh

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