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Victoria
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0 posted 2001-01-13 04:04 PM


Each sapphire raindrop is a tear that flows
crystal wishes flowing from sad eyes
rose-colored dreams, and salt laced bows

Tears of blood and heartache in disguise
aqua rapids, emotions running free
sweet sugar coated and poison berry lies

Hollow promises like stems of a trumpet tree
heartbreak flowing,a crystalized stream
turquoise teardrops, blending as they flee

Tearsdrops hide in a weeping willow's regime
blending with the farrago tears of the night
motley teardrops become a kaleidoscope dream

Raindrops flow blending tears of passions flight
a weeping willow sobs emerald tears in moonlight

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A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)  






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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2001-01-13 05:18 PM


...and the imagery is woven through...

Wonderful!

Victoria
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2 posted 2001-01-13 09:23 PM


thank you Sunshine..nice to hear from you today..

               ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2001-01-13 09:26 PM


Such a tender and sorrowful read Victoria ... you've expressed this so vividly ... very well done.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Poeminister
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4 posted 2001-01-13 09:30 PM


Lovely flow and imagery in this...wonderfully penned.

Poeminister

"...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls-
O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
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5 posted 2001-01-13 09:33 PM


And very colorfully expressed, I can see those sapphire raindrops and turqoise tears. Awesome poem, Vic.
Smile.
Sandra

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6 posted 2001-01-13 11:02 PM


thank you kit poeminister and sandra..i am pleased you enjoyed..thank you all for peeking in

                        ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



jwesley
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7 posted 2001-01-13 11:04 PM


"Saw" this, all the way through. Wonderful.

jwesley

Victoria
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8 posted 2001-01-14 10:35 AM


thank you james..nice to hear from you as always  

                 ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



Robert Joseph
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9 posted 2001-01-17 10:44 AM


Raindrops flow blending tears of passions flight
a weeping willow sobs emerald tears in moonlight

Victoria, You've melded nature and color with tears...brilliantly sad, and effective writing.

Robert Joseph



Victoria
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10 posted 2001-01-17 02:53 PM


thank you Robert..it is nice to hear your comments today..and thank you for taking the time to visit

                 ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



CocoBaci
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11 posted 2001-02-25 08:28 PM


Victoria,
The imagery in your poem is breathtaking...
The expression you penned tugs at the heartstrings...
The bottom line, PoetFriend, is your poem embraced me and in simplier words you've shared an excellent write sweetie...
hugs2uAlways~coco~

Voiceless
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Under the stars upon the wind
12 posted 2001-02-25 08:39 PM


The imagery is beautiful
while the poem flows as
does the tears in your poem..
Well done!


~*Peachy Be*~

JamesMichael
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13 posted 2001-02-25 10:10 PM


I always say let those tears flow
and in this case so eloquently...James

Alwye
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In the space between moments
14 posted 2001-02-25 10:17 PM


What a wonderful combination of sorrow and exquisite imagery...truly well done, I enjoyed the read!

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

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