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Daniel J D
Senior Member

since 2000-10-01

Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia

0 posted 2001-02-19 06:45 PM

Bleeding Soul.

The rage of the anger ceased
The war of words are appeased
My hand bleeds from thorns
Piercing my palm's veins
Stretching the red rose out to you

Tumbling along the corridor of love
Falling down the pits of terror's cove
Sitting near the rocky shore
Reflecting if it is worth it once more
A deep gaze at the wavy horizon
Sends a misty awakening in motion
My soul has bled far too many times

The search for happiness rhymes
Through my fingers' joints
As the depths of my words' points
To a meaningful desire for freedom
From the oblivion of near martyrdom

It is here within my soul's anger
At the very tip of my finger
That the bleeding ceases to flow
It is here within my poetry that I sow
The seeds of happiness, and compassion
For my soul needs a real companion
The "Poem", my lifelong support
Always there, in the midst of my discomfort

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

1 posted 2001-02-19 06:53 PM

"For my soul needs a real companion
The "Poem", my lifelong support
Always there, in the midst of my discomfort"

You have no idea how meaningful this entire poem is. Critique it? I cherish it!
These last few lines flooded over me and brought such peace. Thank you for this, Daniel. I am also proud to be your friend.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Daniel J D
Senior Member

since 2000-10-01

Posts 1471
Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia

2 posted 2001-02-19 07:59 PM

Kathleen,
The joy of writing is the essence of poetry. Thank you so much for the reply, I am glad you liked this poem..

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member

since 1999-12-03

Posts 872
just about where I want to be

3 posted 2001-03-27 01:01 PM

I liked

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

4 posted 2001-03-27 02:00 PM

you translate your feelings quite well with your words, penned it right from your heart.
thank you for sharing my friend.

((hugs))
Charisma

Katherine Chandler
Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 280
Florida, USA

5 posted 2001-03-27 04:18 PM

Best verse:

"For my soul needs a real companion
The "Poem", my lifelong support
Always there, in the midst of my discomfort"

Daniel, this poem moved me to tears, such emotions I felt in reading the best verse and knowing that my writing is my sanity. Thank you for this exceptional piece of writing.

Kate

Blessings

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

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