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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2001-02-17 05:21 PM

Senryu Song

~*~

sing, sing soft, sing low
ring, swing high, bring in ring low
songs, sweet songs, to sing

~*~

sweet the smile to see
singing with sweet melody
sing your tune to me

~*~

aria so true
yield to sing of hymn of you
love me as you do

~*~

sing, bring soft, your song
lend me tender all along
soft, your love, it sings

~*~

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ

VAS
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1 posted 2001-02-17 05:25 PM

soothing, soft melody

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06

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Michigan

2 posted 2001-02-17 05:26 PM

Floating softly through this piece today
Karilea...it has a feathery comfort to
it...absolutely beautiful~

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-02-17 07:46 PM

still listening. . . well, to be honest, I never really stopped. . .

wonderful my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-02-17 07:51 PM

Karilea,
Someties you surprise me. *L*

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song

5 posted 2001-02-18 10:06 AM

You sing beautifully my friend...and the melody whispers of tranquil walks in the breezes. Very nicely done and flawless in it's construction.

Jazzmole
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since 2001-02-15

Posts 30
Texas

6 posted 2001-02-18 10:34 AM

Great Haiku full of alliterations!
Swing low sweet chariot? lol

Blue notes from dark lips
pressed against a silver horn:
Golden in my ears.

Michael~

Wilfred Yeats
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Wilmington, Delaware

7 posted 2001-02-18 12:55 PM

these smoke, as does sweet incense and all the reasons for lighting it

Paula Finn
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missouri

8 posted 2001-02-18 12:58 PM

Isnt this just a great way to write? You sing so sweetly friend...and I hear every word

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

9 posted 2001-02-18 12:59 PM

These Senryu form a beautiful melody, especially liked the last one. Very nicely done.

Poeminister

"...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls-
O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
-Poe

Marsha

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Maidstone Kent England

10 posted 2001-02-18 02:03 PM

Kari dear heart, utterly delightful song, you know how I love a melody

Absolutely fantastique. Brevity is my lesson to day
Love it take care as always
Puck

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Denise

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11 posted 2001-02-18 11:38 PM

Soooooo beautiful, Karilea!! I'm ready!!!

Lighthousebob
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California

12 posted 2001-02-19 12:49 PM

Sunshine,

God has placed a delightful song within you spirit today.

Bob <><

SEA

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with you

13 posted 2001-02-19 01:01 AM

Sunshine~

I love these!! Awesome flow and feel

SEA

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

14 posted 2001-02-19 11:13 AM

Lovely comments, everyone....thank you so much for enjoying these along with me....

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