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In the Moonlight
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In the Moonlight |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
This was obviously inspired by Sunshine's challenge from Open #5, and the reposts thereof...thanks guys for the inspiration... in the moonlight, the shadow of your tears dances... overhead lingers the sound of your heart breaking... the waves of the relentless ocean breathing to me of my transgression... in the moonlight, the shadow of your sad eyes glistens... a distant sailboat carries my ability to reconcile... the seagulls flying above reminding me along with it journeys justification... in the moonlight, the shadow of what love is left taunts... sparse clouds illustrating what I’ve thrown aside... cool ocean breeze dries our tears and brings to mind our first encounter... in the moonlight, the shadow of forgiveness dances... within this incessant honesty lies our chance... touch of music from your kind heart brings my focus once again to your unending acceptance. -kh 02/17/01 everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
in the moonlight, the shadow of your tears dances... overhead lingers the sound of your heart breaking... the waves of the relentless ocean breathing to me of my transgression... in the moonlight, the shadow of your sad eyes glistens... a distant sailboat carries my ability to reconcile... the seagulls flying above reminding me along with it journeys justification... ================= beautiful imagery laced with soft spoken free verse... very well done Sp ... love the promise of this ones emotions with each write you show another side of your growth. way cool  As sure as God made wine you can't wrap your arms around a memory In the dark for me youre the candle flame that flickers to life ~Mission UK~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
SP* JM pegged this one right on...I haven't been in Passions much in the last months but your growth as a poet is evident..and something to be very very proud of...this one floated through the emotions and danced in imagery...beautiful work~ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
BRAVO!!! This is amazing........you swept me up into this.......I love the forgivness......and how good it felt to read. Really wonderful poem  -SEA |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Kris~ i knew you were good but this is simply fantastic! then again i knew you were that too lol loved thisone girlie...full of such beauty and tenderness...and i agree with Jan...you my dear friend are growing by leaps and bounds. jan and holly are two very bright women...listen to them love ya girlie. amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
This poem shows the compassionate side of humanity. Forgiveness, reconciliation, unending acceptance. That's what love is all about.Sounds to me like one of the ten commandments. Really a job well done. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
JM: thank you! your wonderful comments mean a lot to me!  butterflies: well, that is a great compliment to me...I am glad you like this!! SEA: thank you! yes, the forgiveness is a very important part of this...I am glad you like this!! Aims: now, what do I say to that?? Simply fantastic...well, thank you so much, my dear friend...and, being my biggest fan, it is important that you like it!! Thanks, girlie!!  -e ~~~~walker: well, thank you, my friend...the compassionate side of humanity is definitely what I am after in this...I am glad you could stop by!! sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
YEPPERS.....you are growing and taking challenges and finding ways to capture the reader in your own style and all those lead to the sign on your door that says " Please do NOT feed the poet, it could lead to familiarity and fame " I guess you will just have to start thinking about it cause you seem to be eating alot of poetic oats and growing in leaps and bounds. Great write my friend and I love the way you take honesty and love and tie them together to strengthen the bond that sometimes finds it's way swaying. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like what Mark said about eating lots of poetic oats....I have to agree this is a wonderful write ...life seems to be about forgiveness and I for one loved the way you worded this poem...good work! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Mark: wow...what could I say to a reply like that, except that I am honored to have you say that I'm growing poetically...thank you, my dear friend...I am glad you like the part about tying honesty and love together...pretty much the point I was trying to make...  ethome: why, thank you, as well for agreeing with the poetic oats thing...I'm glad you like this one! sp everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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