The Fool's Journey to Ascension

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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-02-16 02:21 AM

and now, for me, I hope, transcend...
it takes a fall to rise again
my treasured hope to but ascend
and shelter flame of soul within.

My mind she thinks too much I think
as I walk step in blind of blink
a footfall in the sand of sink
the journey of the fool on brink

upon the cliff unknowing stride
to be so blind eyes open wide
may all my doubt be cast aside
that as I fall, grow wings to fly!

Grant me courage in despair
flailing feet to rise in air
bereft of net, and freed of care--
Ascend to find me waiting there.

It takes a fool to journey brave
to leave familiar comfort's grave-
perhaps the pawn CAN take the knave
and cease remorseless un-named crave.

Rapture me unto the throne...
and sate my longing to be home.

[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 02-16-2001).]

ATelamon
Member

since 2001-02-06

Posts 328
Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up

1 posted 2001-02-16 02:33 AM

Ahh the journey upwards

As I see in souls ascending

well said

AT

"Time is merely change. It neither enslaves nor determines us. It is instead our opportunity for self-definition"

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

2 posted 2001-02-16 03:06 AM

"It takes a fool to journey brave
to leave familiar comfort's grave-"

That line says a mouthful dear... But then not many have found happiness in comfort's compromise either. Hey, who you calling fool, anyway?

Michael

Dee
Member Elite

since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

3 posted 2001-02-16 03:37 AM

serenity, I really enjoyed this. Especially...

It takes a fool to journey brave
to leave familiar comfort's grave-
perhaps the pawn CAN take the knave
and cease remorseless un-named crave.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

4 posted 2001-02-16 04:25 AM

*Grant me courage in despair
*flailing feet to rise in air
*bereft of net, and freed of care

Serenity, excellent writing and I thank you for this enjoyed read...

Psst->that quote above from your poem I've highlighted is so profound it touched a soft spot with me sweetie

~coco~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2001-02-16 06:02 AM

Hey Celeste! This is excellent writing my dear poet friend and I agree with the above quotes on that particular verse it's so full of searching thoughts!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

6 posted 2001-02-16 04:22 PM

Excellent. I like the feeling in this. Wonderful writing.

Poeminister

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

7 posted 2001-02-16 08:53 PM

the rhyme here is wonderful, I wonder if only fools believe they are safe?
I enjoyed this one, serenity, very, very much.

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

8 posted 2001-02-16 09:13 PM

serenity,
"Look Ma no hands ! " Sometimes painful , sometimes not , always rewarding in one way or another . Excellent read .
Doc

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2001-02-19 11:32 AM

"My mind she thinks too much I think"

Not at all! *S* This is fine thinking wrapped in rhyme. *S* Well done!

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