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A Land Away
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A Land Away |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
A Land AwayI wish to find a land where none can follow, undrawn on maps of brittle, broken lines. A continent upon a sea of hollow, grown ancient under web of ivy vines. A land away, where time and tears may linger, where sentiment spreads fertile as the fern. Away from guilt and pious pointing finger, and voices bathed in fraudulent concern. A habitat of heartful healing season where, naked, I may swim and sleep and play. Unburdened nights of rhyme and clearful reason, to wake, renewed, with lust for dawn and day. But wishes falter frail in drought of darkness unable to discern a trustful sound. Diffused to fog, inaudible and sparkless, unheard, they seep to graves below the ground. Now I divine to wander moor and mountain, through lands away from where I ache to be. A single stream where once there rose a fountain a trickleful is all remains of me. |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
A beautiful wish I share. Wonderful writing.....carries the reader along easily with wonderful imagery. I caught myself joining right in that wish.  To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Claire, your message rings loud and clear....and beautifully scripted, as you always do....thank you for sharing this.... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
just show me the way Claire. . . wonderful. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Claire~ the imagery in this is purely exquisite... loved how you structured this together, as though it floats on air. your writing always is so lovely--and i know that whenever i read it, i'm in for a poetic treat...this surely was no exception. simply beautiful! take care amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
through your pen flows mountain stream; 'tis in the spirit beauty and strength lie. exquisite poetry Claire... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, As I said before, you are my kind of poet. Excellent. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I believe that everyone has wished for this at some point in their chaotic lives. I know that I have.  |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh, I've missed the sweet flow of your words. Michael |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Beautiful thoughts, Meadowmuse. I would love to find such a place. I can see it now though from your description. Dee I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Very elegant writing. Most impressive in form and spoken with heart. Compliments AT |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
MM, I've missed your writing here too I'm so glad I got to read this poem it's beautifully written... Thank you for the enjoyed read ~coco~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a trickleful is all remains of me. your words were beautiful... ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is beautifullyl put together..I love the whole theme and message! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Meadowmuse this was bad bad bad as in Michael Jackson bad hehehe loved it!!! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Claire ... it's so lovely to read you again. Your flow and rhythm is simply stunning. What a beautifully descriptive piece, a wonderful read! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow. This is amazing! I'm going to bookmark it in my library and ask that you allow us to use it in the next issue of the newsletter. Please!!! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
forgot to hit that durn button in my excitement!! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Sounds like the continent of paradise. A lovely dream cast in these words. A pleasure to read. Poeminister |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I do love the way you write! "I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent expression of longing, Claire! Expertly crafted. To find such a place would be wonderful!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Denise, thank you for reading and for finding this post for me! I looked and looked for it, but thought it was lost or deleted or invisible or something. At any rate, I now think I have my settings adjusted correctly here (thanks Walt!) and can find things more easily. Sincere thanks to EVERYONE who read this piece, for your gracious and receptive words of encouragement and welcome. You all are quite terrific, and you should congratulate yourselves for being a part of such a unique group. (o: Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
is great poetry still being written? dam straight - - Look at "a land away' by Claire |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If you find this place, could you please send directions? *S* Until then, I'll lose myself in your words... this is lovely! |
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