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Ode to Depression
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Ode to Depression |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Conquer me not, insidious one I am not going to lie down for you. You may take your heavy heart, your foot upon my chest, and your ceaseless tears, and leave me. Yes, you have touched me but you will not win. I will take my life back from your clutches- you will not pull me under. Because as sinister as you are, I am stronger. You cannot have me- not yet. I have dreams to fulfill and they shall live before I sleep. Begone then- your seductive ways are unwelcome. Yes, I see your abyss, so oddly alluring but you can't have it all, have you not taken enough? Aparently not, because I still live and hope and love with a fierceness that renders you impotent. So goodbye your visit was interesting but it's over. [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 02-16-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Beautiful piece, absolutely... However, " have dreams to fulfill and promises to keep and they shall live before I sleep." may be just a little too "Frost"y to be comortable to the reader not to mention copyright laws. However, I don't know everything about those laws. |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
I love the sense of control...and stern appeal to this piece. Very good! Robert Joseph |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Fantastic write! These lines really stood out for me “Aparently not, because I still live and hope and love with a fierceness that renders you impotent.” A very interesting read This poem is a prescription!  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent Sandra!! it's good to just take hold of it and show it the door. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Begone ye screams of silence, harbingers of pain Cloaked in isolation, you mock in harsh disdain My soul is torn asunder, I curse you God of Hell As you pierced my tortured soul, what horrors I befell You spoke of quiet solitude, to tempt me to your lair Then lanced me in my troubled heart, to depths of dark despair.... Well written and expressed... depression is suffered by so many, but understood by so few... an enemy that can be conquered as shown by your poetry. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 02-15-2001).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Recognizing the problem and refusing defeat are powerful first steps... good luck in shaking a most unwelcome companion. *S* |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Loved this one, Sandra!! This one has your spirit built in, and with that, you can win anything!!  Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Wonderful strength shown in this. Excellent writing. Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 02-18-2001).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love to read this type of writing, it's the answer to certain kinds of communication that is needed to connect! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Catalina, Wow! This is superb. You have been doing some paramountly deep pondering. I hope he will heed the message... Love, Elise |
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lostinspace New Member
since 2001-02-16
Posts 4 |
This is the first poem I've read and I love it here already. Your abyss so oddly alluring... My humble opinion, this is great. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Sandra! Wow! So very powerfully written, and with such conviction ... I loved the strength in these words, really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
catalinamoon, Wow.. what strength. I'm printing out this poem.. I could definately read this in the mornings. Some days here late have been real hard. Thank you for sharing your words. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Yes, you have touched me but you will not win. I will take my life back from your clutches- you will not pull me under. Because as sinister as you are, I am stronger.' Excellently put, Sandra! Wonderful show of your strong spirit! sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sandra, Me thinks you found your strength and I believe wisdom as well, wonderful to see the spirit in you dear and wonderful reading also. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Yeppers, cowboy is really liking the positive note in this one. I knew you would and could and shall. Your strength is showing it's teeth and I am going to sit back and watch you conquer that most unhealthy visitor piece by piece. Excellent write my friend and many smiles for you finding your way through all the confusion and mess. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sandra, OHIWIHWT, not just because of the strength of the write but also because of the strength of the conviction behgind the write Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I think how many times I've uttered/written such words - to a controlling lover -and how many times I succumbed right after - I hope I don't react to depression the same way = I've enough reason to be strong (or weak) Thanks for this |
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