Open Poetry #12 |
Somewhere In My Mind |
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I'm going away For how long I don't know I just know I need time To heal an empty heart So I'll go somewhere warm Somewhere in my mind. Someplace without you Without the memory of your kiss A place south of nowhere Where dreams don't exsist And I can forget Somewhere in my mind. Maybe I'll fly Like an eagle, wings flared To a distant mountain peak To hide untouched By all that you were Somewhere in my mind. Or maybe I'll drift On soft ocean currents Adrift on an empty sea Where every word doesnt remind me Of the man I thought you were Somewhere in my mind. Somewhere I'll find A place without you Where days can just pass Without anger and pain And I can be free Somewhere in my mind. |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Seems so very sad for a day of love like this. I hope you find that peaceful place in your mind and it brings you comfort. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I'll echo inot2B and add...I think I shouldn't want to go where there are no dreams for without dreams, where would we be? Very well-written piece with strong emotion, and we do need escape every now and then, to go apart, to rest, meditate, consider. find away to love again. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I don't think I have such a forgetting place in my mind... but I wish you peace in finding yours. *S* Well done! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Oh yes I know this feeling...but we have to feel the pain and the anger...sooner or later...this is life...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Paula this is such well written reality put in poetic form...I can really feel the depth of your feelings...very very well done!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
take me with you!! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Or maybe I'll drift On soft ocean currents Adrift on an empty sea Where every word doesnt remind me Of the man I thought you were Somewhere in my mind.' Excellent penning of such a hard thing to deal with...great write...I like it! sp everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
We definitely see the color blue beneath your letters of red...hiding away in this loveless lament. Good Work! Robert Joseph |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula dear heart, this is utterly totally excellent, beautifully written. The depth of emotions are wonderful, and the imagery far surpasses anything else. I could really see all this dear heart, truly magnificent. How many more times I am not biased, it is utterly fabulous Love and stuff Take care as always Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Paula--Often the more we try to forget about something the more we just can't, well expressed feelings in this, nicely done. Poeminister |
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Mario Junior Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 21Ireland |
Paula I was very moved by your write. I hope you soar like your eagle. LOL Mario. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Paula, these thoughts expressed in your poem have lingered in my mind lately... Great writing sweetie... My heart and mind appreciated this read... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Paula, if you find this place, where we can go and forget about the love and the pain, I want to hitch a ride. Awesome write, my friend. Sandra |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
inot2B...well I havent found it yet but I know its there somewhere..thanks |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
If I tell you IM truly NOT blonde would you believe me? SIGH I didnt think so LOL VAS...but sometimes dreams just give us false hope...thank you Suthern...I dont think I do either but I sure can hunt for it now cant I? Thanks James...I understand that really I do...and we need to live each day but you know some days are harder than others...hugs sweetie ethome...ah E what can I say? Its a hurt that will ease eventually...thank you sweet poet man Kathleen...lets go sp...I'm so glad you like this...your opinion means a lot to me...thanks RobertJoseph...thank you Robert...yes I was rather blue when I wrote this but thats just part of love now isnt it? Marsha...do you know how much Ive come to depend on your kind words? HUGS to you my sister of the heart Poeminister...yes its kind of like a splinter you cant quite get to...thank you Mario...welcome to Passions...thank you for reading my poem...one day I will soar Coco...Im glad I can linger in your heart even if its with such a sad poem...thanks Sandra...always room for another here...thank you sweet friend |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
An excellent write Paula. "I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly |
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