»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #12
»
if I'd only met you when (#1)--(for "timing is everything")
| Open Poetry #12 |
|
if I'd only met you when (#1)--(for "timing is everything") |
|
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
|
do you remember when we met? funny, it seems like it was yesterday sun in the sky, breeze through the trees there you stood wrapped in a white gauze dress blonde hair and blue eyes blinding my vision I walked up, introduced myself we wound up spending the day together and when the day was over we just couldn't say goodbye but we had to that day and in your kiss, I knew that we would never have to after that I remember the first time I was alone with you I was so nervous you were so beautiful and me, I was just this simple guy who still couldn't believe that we were together we went on from there living and loving laughing and crying we built a life together you and I and now. . . excuse me? Sir, excuse me? Huh??? Sir, would you like fries with that? oh. . . um. . . yeah. . . . . . sure. . . funny, if only I'd met you when and not now. . . . . . timing is everything. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 02-14-2001).] |
||
| © Copyright 2001 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
~weep~ Timing is everything...and after your so kind reply to the poem you know I am referring to you will know why this poem affects me right? Hugs... K ...and I have found that a lifetime can be lived in one moment... T.G.M. |
||
|
ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
John, Yes, timing is everything.......good luck to you. ~laura~ |
||
|
jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
its amazing sometimes what comes out of a challenge, i love to see how the different poets take to the challenge.....this is no exception...sven this is really really touching.....and well done.....the form makes it even more effective and dramatic...nice work  |
||
|
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
K, yes. . . I know why. . . {{HUGS}} Laura, I know that it is. . . but why??? Thank you. . . jb, thank you. . . just thought I'd take a different look at it. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
||
|
Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
AD dear heart, this is quite simply utterly beautiful. Outstandingly totally stunning. Timing is everything, and my doesn't it make a difference. (Thus speaketh the voice of experience) Love it truly  Take care love as always Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
||
|
catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, I have so many thoughts on this, mostly regret that we do have to wish for better timing, when we had already found the right one, and let them go, somehow. Beatiful. This is perfect in so many ways. S |
||
|
Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Hehehehehe. I love the fries bit! Looking for part two now! ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
||
|
ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I read part 2 first but this makes me realize the quality of both and I really enjoyed the read! (both times) |
||
|
athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sven, I can completely relate to this beauty. And as they say, "Timing is of the Essence" NOW can we build that time machine??? Much love, Elise |
||
|
CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
hi Sven, I have much reading to catchup on these days but I'm pleased I got a chance to read your #1 it's delightful reading and I enjoyed the 'spin/angle' you took for the challenge... Really creative PoetFriend *~coco~* |
||
|
Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
John-- I am kinda backwards these days lol as I read part 2 before part 1 so i had to read this one and then reread the second part...but i must say absoultely stunning work. i love how you worded and structured this...and you are so right... timing is everything... take care amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
||
|
AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
As always, brilliant, Sven, my friend. I love that whole lost in a moment thing. Going to find part 2 now. "And I wanted you to turn away. You don't remember, but I do. You never even tried..." ~Fuel |
||
|
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Mushy love, thank you. . . indeed that is the lesson for this V-Day!!! Sandra, if I had better timing. . . well, I'm sure that you know the rest. . . thank you my friend. . . Sheri, thanks!! I like that part too!! Who among us hasn't zoned out like this?? ethome, thank you my friend. . . glad that you enjoyed. . . Elise, if you draw up the plans, I'm sure that we can find someone to help us build it. . . PoetFriend Coco, thank you so much!!! Amy, glad that you liked them both. . . and you're forgiven for being backwards. . . I think a lot of us are these days!! AniKay, yep. . . if only we could stay in those moments. . . *sigh*. . . thank you. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
