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We Took The Chance (a valentine poem)
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We Took The Chance (a valentine poem) |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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Hallowed gleam lands on shadows That within my spirit linger, Hushing darkness with but a sigh And loving, outstretched fingers... From somewhere between strands of time, Where dreams are touchable, You’ve been born to me in quiet grace With your beauty shining, ever full. I hold your essence, breathe your words, And wrap you gently in my thoughts, On wings of air made with glitter-glow Is how to me you have been brought... If I could embrace you through this life, Eternity I would sacrifice, For nothing else than kissing you Would ever be able to suffice. When my mind is blood and shades of gray And frigid emptiness encloses Your brightness comes in gentle bursts And of my doubts, disposes... I know our love is etched somewhere Where reverie and light collide, And I thank the Heaven’s every day That we took the chance and tried. ~*For Abrahm, my best friend and love. Happy V-day!*~ *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is sweet!!! And doubly so because you both are so wonderful!! Such talent between you amazes me.  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Krista~ How beautiful ! What a lovely, lovely Valentine to share with a loved one. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You can't have a love better than this! Happy Valentine's Day!  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"And I thank the Heavens every day that we took the chance and tried." Enjoyed reading your poem...James |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
beautifully done Krissa. you really know how to move words to your advantage. "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" ~Broadway Musical RENT~ *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
That within my spirit linger, Hushing darkness with but a sigh And loving, outstretched fingers... From somewhere between strands of time, ==================== If I could embrace you through this life, Eternity I would sacrifice, For nothing else than kissing you Would ever be able to suffice. ===================== I know our love is etched somewhere Where reverie and light collide, And I thank the Heaven’s every day That we took the chance and tried. ==================== leave it to you to give me my worst case of poetic envy for the day  WOW K ... WOW ... I dont know what I envy more... this poem or being THIS inspired... "I know our love is etched somewhere Where reverie and light collide," oh my ... big ole heaving *SIGH* take a bow sweets ... you just penned the be-all-see-all Valentines poem. the comparisons, metaphor, and imagery are outstanding ... as is your phrasing and vocab choices... and the rhyme is cadence kissed but the love-glow in this is enchanting. Happy Valentines Day Krista |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Put in on a card and send it to the "Hallmark Card of Fame" museum. What a perfect Valentine poem and when I say "perfect" I ain't kidding around. Not only is this one beautifully penned but it is done so exquisitely and then toss in the inspiration that could bring such a piece and you have it all. In the library with a huge smile. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh, Abraham is such a very lucky man indeed to share a beautiful heart such as yours, in which he also has. Oh, your love will forever light the heavens! Oh, this line was so very romantic: "I know our love is etched somewhere Where reverie and light collide, And I thank the Heaven’s every day That we took the chance and tried." (sigh) You have such a beautiful heart, my friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light shine upon you this lovely Valentines Day! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"When my mind is blood and shades of gray And frigid emptiness encloses Your brightness comes in gentle bursts And of my doubts, disposes..." Krista, this is lovely and so special. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Krista you are the sweetest. This was absolutely incredible. It was a great joy to have to recieve a poem list his on Valentine's Day. I am indeed a very lucky man, Thank you sweetheart Abrahm Simons "And every state of mind, left to itself, every shutting up of the creature within the dungeon of its own mind - is, in the end, Hell [This message has been edited by Dusk Treader (edited 02-15-2001).] |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
wow hwat a well expressed tribute of love for your Valentine! Beautiful! Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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