One True Eternal Spring (Double Independant Acrostic #11)

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ATelamon
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since 2001-02-06

Posts 328
Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up

0 posted 2001-02-11 07:04 AM

one moment
now becomes our
eden  me and you
eternitys breathe
true   harmonies
emotions    unwrap
round   each  other
now  you enfolding I
awaken all touches in
love    forever   rising

While it may be true that "No man is an island..." You must admit there are some extremely large peninsulas out there.

[This message has been edited by ATelamon (edited 02-11-2001).]

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2001-02-11 07:29 AM

Great work! Love that format and you said a lot in such a few words....emotion packed and open....good stuff!

Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination!

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 2001-02-11 10:05 AM

This is so good. Acrostics give me headaches when I try to write them, but for you to do a double is incredible!!

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

3 posted 2001-02-11 10:12 AM

ATelemon,
I've gotta agree with the others , Well done , much said with very little .
Doc

JLR
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since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

4 posted 2001-02-11 11:49 AM

I've been reading since your first post but this is the first time I've responded...maybe because it's the first one I've understood. Haha I enjoy them all, read them over and over...I'll get it sooner or later. By the way, love your 'address'. I have a series of poems collectively called 'Limbo'. It is a maddening place to be. Yet I stay, go figure. Thanks for the challenge of your work.

ATelamon
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since 2001-02-06

Posts 328
Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up

5 posted 2001-02-11 12:03 PM

I thank you all for your comments. Somehow the physical layout of the poem did not take correctly. So it is visually not as I had designed.

Oh well just making sense fo the thing was trouble enough.

Glad these dabblings into oddity are enjoyable. I have had fun. And will no doubt soon post something non-acrostic, (do I wirte those???) (laughing)

As for my address, well I would say that is relatively accurate, as strange as that may seem.

Thanks again.
Back to holding up my end, oh the life of a glorified column you know.

"Time is merely change. It neither enslaves nor determines us. It is instead our opportunity for self-definition"

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

6 posted 2001-02-11 12:08 PM

a
lovely
openly emotive
verse
eliciting the
lasting pleasures of
years blended through the
vastness of
eternity -
reflecting the
sense of
ever and ever

[This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 02-11-2001).]

DawnG

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since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

7 posted 2001-02-11 12:19 PM

I've recently found the love of writing acrostics. How you've did this double one os something I havent tried yet, but it is really cool. Great work.

Dawn

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