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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Today I pulled out all the old pictures today Sat in front of an open window Dared the winter to warm my heart And I looked at them…one by one I tried to understand But it was never anything I saw Never anything you did or said It was only that you loved me. I gathered up all the old poems today Sat beside the fireplace Dared the embers to cool my pain And I read them…one by one I tried to understand But it was never anything I said Never anything you saw or did It was only that you loved me. I dug up all the old memories today Sat there on our bed Dared it somehow to comfort me And I remembered them…one by one I tried to understand But it was never anything I did Never anything you saw or said It was only that you loved me. I placed all the moments together today Sat here in my chair Dared peace to brave my broken heart And then l let them go…one by one I didn’t try to understand It was nothing that I said or did It was nothing that you saw It was only that you loved me And you don’t love me anymore. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
very touching and heartfelt. . . an excellent first post. . . *sigh*. . . sorry. . . been going through my own "pictures" recently, so this poem hits home. . . Welcome to Passions my friend. . . please stay awhile. . .  ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
JLR, The memories of love gone are the worse. And asking why and where are worse yet. You will mend and life will go on. Hope you like it here at Passions, like your poem. Hugs, ME |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Welcome to Passions. You should fit right in here. Yes, it's hard to escape those memories and those questions. It does get better with time, but it never goes away completely. I do like the way you wrote it out. You structured it very nicely, too. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Thank you Sven, you'll always be my first... Mother and KCS---thank you so much for reading and commenting. I hope to visit and grow here with all of your help. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to Passions!!! This is very sad but written with a definite ring of truth. Please check you email! |
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adagirl26 New Member
since 2001-02-11
Posts 4 |
Love lost is still love known Be grateful for the experience as I am for your words of it. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I have been doing that myself today...reading, gathering, remembering, crying, trying to understand...very nice first post huggzzz and welcome ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I pulled out all the old pictures today Sat in front of an open window Dared the winter to warm my heart And I looked at them…one by one I tried to understand But it was never anything I saw Never anything you did or said It was only that you loved me.' Excellent, excellent first post, JLR! I absolutely love this! Also looking forward to more of yours!  sp  everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I taste you on my lips... every night I fantasize that I can feel you on my fingertips... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is so sad but so full of that kind of beauty that sadness brings out of the heart... very well done! Reality seldom bears the possibilities of imagination! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
excellent write..could feel each moment, each dare, and the letting go...what a painful but necessary event--the letting go.. hope to read more from you!  g"maybe one day we can turn and face our fears maybe one day we can reach out through our tears..." -a grant |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
I do like the various dares you throw at and to the apparent vagaries of life in this. I was struck by those most of all. Not a surprise as I often am struck when i dare life to do such. Well done. AT |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Welcome to passions JLR, you make a lovely poetic first impression with this well written and expressed piece. I look forward to more of your work. nice to have you here. take care jm Where the touch of the lover ends And the soul of the friend begins There's a need to be separate and a need to be one And a struggle neither wins |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Another poem where K compulsively says ~sniff~ most sad... welcome to passions...and thanks for the read.  K- it was not an unmusical sound: long, falling, half a sigh, like wind in the wires, or a train distancing. The Muse of Distance, A. Williamson |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Awww, so sad but I know we all can relate. You found the words better than I ever could. Very well written, my friend. Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I believe that this time of year brings a lot of us to going through the memories of past loves and trying to figure out where the magic went. Exceptional first post and I will be looking forward to more from you. Welcome to Passions BTW......You will love it here I am sure. If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 02-11-2001).] |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Thanks everyone for reading and responding. I was gratefully surprised at the reception. I didn't say thanks before now...'cause I didn't want to send this back to the top. But I felt it nonetheless. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this evening, he said to me he lost me a year or so ago...to poetry...I printed out 50 pages of poems to show him tomorrow morning that I was never lost to him...he threw me aside...glancing overyour poem again reminded me how much alike we have been lately... ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Thanks for reading again, Wynter. I wish I had let go as completely as those words expressed. I have walked away...but my heart doesn't live in my body anymore. It will be a long time I imagine before I will be brave enough to invite it back. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Brilliant piece, J....my first post wasn't nearly as good as this...hey let's trade....I'm just joking with you....welcome to Passions and I hope you enjoy it here! Nathan |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi JLR, What a wonderful piece to start out with at Passions, acknowledgment is half the battle I think, welcome to Passions I hope you enjoy your stay. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JLR, A sad but passionate welcome to passions. Excellent work. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I like this, the form, the repeated lines all lend well to the final acceptance in the ending.....very sad, very nice written welcome |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Nate, Cerenity, Sey, Jelly---thank you all for responding. I was supposed to be out finding a new job---but here I am. This is addicting. Thank you for reading and appreciating. You all make my day---no matter how bad it was before I got here! |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
R.J. I can definitely relate to this one. Keep writing and i'll ttys. ~Laura~ |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Ooops, how did I miss this one, it almost passed me by, excellent writing, I am envious of your style and your ability to put emotions into words. Thanks for posting. Regards, Olias. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This was so well done...the build up to the last line, amazing, yet so simple...wonderful writing that many can relate to, including me...Welcome to Passions |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I think a lot of us can relate to the pain of having to let go... this is great! Welcome to PIP! |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Sometimes, its just that simple, love evaporates. But, there is always hope for another love. Well written. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
JLR, You write so beautifully and with such honesty. Baring your soul to the embers is not an easy task. Hang around for a while, you'll be amazed at how much this place helps you heal. Take care. Dee I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I can't believe this is still around...but thank you all! When I remember the intensity of the pain the day I wrote it and compare that to it's present level...I am most grateful for the healing I have found here. Thank you all very much for reading. |
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NC Member
since 2001-02-20
Posts 89 |
what a wonderful talent you have very painful piece to read but so very well done Nice! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wonderfully written! Sad ending. <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
JLR--Your poem touched me greatly, but your reply..."it will be a long time before I invite it back" brought tears. |
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